User talk:Vinisha Rana/sandbox

Review of Trauma Related Physical Symptoms and Illness
Hey Vinisha and Jessica,

Overall a good job on the outline draft of your article. So far it contains some really good ideas, and is a solid start to your article. I think this will work better once you have it divided into sections and include a lead section with a general overview of your topic. Might be nice to break up into sections like “Trauma on the Biological Level” or “Trauma and Illnesses,” to group specific regions or ideas together. Maybe look at trauma outcomes on a macro and micro level, or physiological and genetic/genomic. Or look at trauma across lifetimes, like outcomes of child vs. adult trauma.

One thing I found a little confusing was the addition of psychological outcomes in the first section (re: anxiety, fear, and suicidal ideation from the article you cite about long-term effects of child sexual abuse). I assumed your topic was relating physical or physiological illnesses and symptoms stemming from trauma, and not psychological. Perhaps clarify if you’re planning to include psychological illness as well.

You should also try to cite each point (in particular the last sentence of the first paragraph about the nature of trauma and its influence, and the very last statement about service men and sexual trauma). I think in Wikipedia we don’t write summary statements like in journal articles; mostly just write the facts and cite it.

In your final draft you should link ideas like PTSD, childhood trauma, and telomere lengths to their Wiki pages.

Also, you list the same articles a couple times in your reference section and cite them with different numbers (i.e. Beitchman, et. al, 1992; O’Donovan, et. al, 2011; Kiecolt-Glaser, et. al, 2011). This should probably be cleared up before publishing.

Hope this helps!

Peter PeterLouras3 (talk) 04:26, 1 November 2017 (UTC)
 * I agree with a lot of what peter said. It looks like you have lot of good information. Your sources that appear currently appear to be more review articles, which Wikipedia seems to really like.


 * I think the sections will help the flow and organization. From what I can tell right now, each sentence looks like it could be it's own section or subheading.  It could be organized like Peter suggested through Physical, Biological, Sleep, Dysfunction, etc. depending on how much information there is.  It might even be beneficial to have a separate section for military/gender differences.


 * I agree that I'm unsure if the psychological symptoms would belong on your article based on the title, unless it was a general introduction type of statement. BrianSeo1 (talk) 05:03, 1 November 2017 (UTC)