User talk:Vmalla3/sandbox

Jayjay's Peer Review
The lead section is good. One note I have is to include more information on the work she did for University college London. Also, it would be helpful to specify what kind of work she did for UCL. I would add more detail to the beginning of your career section, perhaps where she taught and for how long. And how did she study and research at Birkbeck college. Also one thing missing from the page as a whole, I feel, is a set timeline. I'm not sure if the page is chronological because barely any dates are presented. I think you do a good job of covering her career and life in a balanced way. I would consider adding more detail and context uniformly. Also, if your sources allow, I would present more specific instances of work she did like you mentioned with the PerDis project in 1998. Overall, you document is very neutral, presenting just the facts which I like. I would consider adding more citations for the information in the article. Currently you only have one source, so I would just add the rest to show notability and guarantee reliability.

Jayjay Ugbe (talk) 18:08, 11 July 2019 (UTC)

Sophia's peer review
Lead: Great start! You have a good overview of her life and it is very clear. One thing i have seen other articles include is your person's birth and death date in parenthesis right after her name in the lead. Its not essential but it is something to consider if you'd like.

Sections: I'm pretty sure you were just focusing on getting the most important part of your article out of the way first, but i would include an "early life" section before the career section just to give some background and so your article makes chronological sense.

Career section: You have lots of really interesting information, but I think you could split the section into early life and then career. You could just include the first little paragraph and then the first sentence of the next paragraph about her education, and then you'd be set. Aside from that, I really liked everything else!

Neutral Content: You are 100% neutral! Yay!

Sources: So far you only have one source which isn't ideal. Hopefully you have others written down somewhere else, just don't forget to put them in! Also, if you are planning to put all of your sources/citations in at the end, it might be a good idea to make small notes throughout the article (maybe in parentheses) to remind you which sentences or information came from which source so you don't get confused and make mistakes later on.

Sharing the love: You do a really great job of taking a really complicated topic and "dumbing it down" to make it easier to read and understand for those of us less versed in computer programming!

Other notes: Maybe consider linking some of the key words in the article just to make it look more like other articles. Also, don't forget to add how/when she died. Overall, great!

Sophia.colosi (talk) 18:15, 11 July 2019 (UTC)