User talk:Vmauceri

Smart Board
Hi. Welcome to Wikipedia, and thanks for working to improve the site with your edit to Smart Board, as we really appreciate your participation. However, large portions of the edit had to be removed or changed for the following reasons:


 * Wikipedia articles must be written in a neutral tone. Thus calling David Martin's idea "great" is inappropriate. Such opinions are certainly appropriate, mind you, if your citing a product review supported by a citation of a secondary source.
 * The trip that David Martin and Nancy Knowlton took through New York does not appear to be relevant to the history of the company, since Knowlton had nothing to do with the founding of the company, nor did their conversation.
 * The source you cited says that the company was founded a year after the conversation in question, not "within a year".
 * People on Wikipedia should generally be referred to by their surname, not their given name.
 * Anniversaries, in and of themselves, have nothing to do with the founding of a company. The year of founding is already given, so the reader can do the math themselves. An anniversary would only be significant to mention if there is material that pertains to that anniversary year, such as the centennial of the Statue of Liberty.
 * A company is a singular noun, so it should not be referred to with the plural pronoun "they", but with the singular "it".
 * Spaces should not be placed in between material and citations, as indicated by WP:PAIC.
 * Sentences should end in punctuation.

I've edited the passage in question to bring it into compliance with these various policies and guidelines. If you ever have any other questions about editing, or need help regarding the site's policies, just let me know by leaving a message for me in a new section at the bottom of my talk page. Thanks. Nightscream (talk) 01:19, 29 May 2014 (UTC)