User talk:Vmettlen1/sandbox

I reviewed |Great Pacific Garbage Patch article on wikipedia

The article seemed very neutral and educational. I felt breaking it down into smaller sub topics was useful for the reader to find out what they wanted to know about the topic.For example Discovery-they explain who discovered it and what they found. Affect on human and marine life- they explain how it is affecting the sea water as well as the organisms. The information is reliable, information is found from natgeo, and many other articles that seem they would be interesting individually.

Rain Water collection
Victoria

♠ Benefits some of many

reduce the amount of rainwater that will end up in a runoff

storage of rainwater will contribute to supply and demand

reduce the amount of property damage due to flooding

stored rainwater is beneficial for emergencies, such as power outages or droughts beneficial to protecting aquifers that are significantly declining due to the increase in population. Sustainable City Discourses and Practices Sierra

This article takes a look into exploring the emerging of these sustainable cities and to take a look at their practices and conditions of the actual development itself and how these methods prove to be significant in the development and sustainability of these cities.

In this article, we take a look at both present and past initiatives towards the sustainable city field in regards to effecient monitoring techniques to track its effeciency. This takes a look at how data is collected on these cities currently. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sierrawiley2 (talk • contribs) 19:09, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

The Failure of Sustainable Cities - Tiarah

With eco-cities becoming the new standard, this article covers the required policies for said establishments. It goes further to discuss the decline of Masdar City, a once highly anticipated zero carbon city. Cugurullo explains the eco-city collapsed due to modernization influenced by market analysis instead of ecological studies.

The rise of environmental consciousness has caused a demand for eco-cities. Cugurullo walks us through the economic, social, and environmental steps of building an eco-city. The three areas are weighed heavily by economic interests while social and environmental aspects are just a façade.

This article discusses the development of the first two zero carbon cities. It delves into the success of a zero-carbon city being achieved by the sacrifices citizens must make. Tiarah2 (talk) 19:16, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

You have a great foundation for what can be a good, effective update to rainwater collection article. I particularly found helpful how you organized your information, however if I can add a suggestion: you should try working on the basic grammar formats (capitalize the letters, add periods to end of sentences, and play around with the formatting for aesthetics). You're article seems very interesting I am interested to see what else you can add to improve it. Ljm186 (talk) 19:00, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

I see that you guys have a great foundation for reworking your article. I was puzzled why these edits are in your talk page and not in the actual sandbox. Anyway, most issues include your formatting and grammatical structure. A little more info on what exactly you are working on would be helpful! t.williams (talk) 17:05, 16 March 2018 (UTC)

feedback
your are on a good track to advance the article, so please keep adding more content, esp with regards to building design and benefits. you can also take some guidance from the readings for class. in addition, please keep also commenting on each others work. Karina Schafer (talk) 13:42, 29 March 2018 (UTC)