User talk:Vmp815

Hi, I am a new member to Wikipedia and am not sure how to ask an editor for help on my additional sections so I thought this was the best way to ask for help. So, I added two sections to the Tata Group article. My sections are Corporate Social Responsibility and Business in Relation to Ethics. I had edited it a couple of times after I posted it, trying to make better changes but it still didn’t turn out well. Can you please give me advice on my writing style and my headings, are they appropriate? Does my article have a good neutral point of view? How are my citations? Also I was wondering why some of my sentences are coming in the dotted text box- can you tell me more about that? Is there anything else I can improve on? Thanks for all your help! Vmp815 (talk) 23:21, 29 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Hello! Welcome to Wikipedia! Thanks for helping to make Wikipedia better :)


 * With regards to your edits: They are very good given your experience but it still needs some work shopping. First off, I would remove the whole ethics section, it is not something that is very encyclopedic, The same goes for the Corporate Social Responsibility section. I would try to incorporate some of the information from the Corporate Social Responsibility section to other parts of the article. Another thing I want to point out is your paragraphs, you need to try to make them large but not overly large, if they are to long than no one will read them.


 * Feel free to contact me back here with any questions or comments! Also if you want a mentor I can help you.


 * And once again welcome to Wikipedia! :-) Peter.C  •  talk  •  contribs  00:44, 30 March 2011 (UTC)