User talk:Vpatel225/sandbox

Peer Review
What does the article (or section) do well? It provides a good overview of the motel scene in the modernization section and provides good statistics showing the presence of Indian ownership in the motel business. What changes would you suggest overall? I would suggest embellishing a little on the Gujurati aspect that you mention and maybe common occurrences in how people new to the country end up buying a motel with this community (if applicable). I don't know anything about the space but I wonder if the AAHOA plays any role in securing buying opportunities for those looking to join the industry. What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think expanding on the community aspect that you mention and try to maybe draw a stronger connection between this and how it leads more Indians to get into the business. For instance, why does getting financial support from a family member or friend in the motel industry mean that they too buy into the industry? Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! BrandonS23 (talk) 18:10, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review Comments 11/4
'''What does the article (or section) do well?

I like the information you have so far - I think you did a good job summarizing the existing market.

'''What changes would you suggest overall?

I was wondering if this is for a larger page, maybe motels in America, or if it would be its standalone page. I think it reads currently as if it is for another page, which is good if that is your goal. If it is to be a standalone page, perhaps there are more things to write about and more information to add, like an introduction and other categories.

'''What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

Perhaps there are more topics to write about that give what you have more context, such as the history of Indian motel ownership (how it started and became popular) or potentially if there's a concentration of Indian motel ownership in the country (north, south, east, west). I personally like to see pictures on Wikipedia pages, so potentially if there's anything worth adding might be nice. I would definitely add links to other Wikipedia pages - I think that helps to qualify your topic and helps with contextual information.

GWCR6 (talk) 18:31, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

I think this contribution definitely addresses a content gap, which is great. As others have noted, if you are able to find images to illustrate your piece that would be a good addition. Make sure that for every claim or point you make that you include a reference source. In some cases, rephrasing a bit would be helpful to keep the tone neutral--for example, in this sentence: "Many of these are first or second generation immigrants that came to the country looking to get away from their struggles back in India, and instead live out the "American Dream". These immigrants largely chose motels as their investment of choice because they were able to get connections and financial help from their family members who already might be in the motel industry, and also because they could live at the property itself" maybe if you have a source where individuals say these things that you can then reference in your sources? Amyc29 (talk) 18:49, 4 November 2022 (UTC)