User talk:Vphillip16/sandbox

Hi, just a suggestion. This "It's illustrations, illustrated by Bryan Collier, was honored by ...." should be "The illustrations which were drawn by Bryan Collier was honored by ...".Anneteag (talk) 18:30, 12 April 2016 (UTC)

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This could possibly be worded differently to avoid run-on sentences. "The Judge: An Untrue Tale is a 48 page children's picture book written by author Harvey Finchstrom, under the pen name, Harve Zemach and Margot Zemach, and illustrated by Margot Zemach." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Anneteag (talk • contribs) 17:45, 3 May 2016 (UTC)

Hey. Just wanted to suggest that the following sentence can be worded differently. "Rosa is a children's picture book interpreting and recapturing the story of Rosa Parks, and her revolutionary stance that sparked the civil rights movement."

Such as: "Rosa is a children's picture book. It interprets and recaptures the story of Rosa Parks and her influential revolutionary stance that helped spark the civil rights movement." Best, Unified101Unified101 (talk) 19:08, 7 May 2016 (UTC)