User talk:Vuej2093/Salmonella

Good Afternoon!

After reading your proposed changes on the Wiki page of salmonella I have a few things I would like to suggest. In your first sentence you say salmonella can be caused by "proper or improper hygiene." This seems to suggest to readers that following proper hygiene can put them at risk for salmonella, which can potentially be misleading and is important to avoid in articles like this.

Secondly, you are using "effects" when you mean to be saying "affects." It is important to minimize grammatical errors in your proposed changes to the Wiki page.

Thirdly, you are not allowed to directly quote from your sources, even if you put quotation marks around the phrase and properly cite it. This was in our plagiarizing training and violates Wikipedia policy.

Lastly, it is advisable to use more citations when presenting information. There are several lines where you present statistics or claims that are not backed by sources. This can create an element of doubt for any reader and can reduce the strength of your proposed changes.

Overall, you have a solid foundation for your article. I would just suggest checking for grammatical errors and perhaps reviewing the training modules involving plagiarizing and sources/citations.

Good luck! Nbarta (talk) 20:09, 24 November 2019 (UTC)