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Tattoo Edits
A tattoo is a form of body modification where a design is made by inserting ink, dyes and pigments, either indelible or temporary, into the dermis layer of the skin to change the pigment. The art of making tattoos is tattooing.

Tattoos can fall into three broad categories (typically with distinct overlap): decorative (with no specific meaning); symbolic (with a specific meaning pertinent to the wearer); pictorial (a depiction of a specific person or item). Tattoos have historically been regarded in the West as 'uncivilised', and over the last 100 years the fashion has been associated mainly with sailors, working men, criminals, and "deviant" women. By the end of the 20th century many Western stigmas of the tattoo culture had been dismissed and the practice has become more socially acceptable depending on a person's trade, race, ethnicity, age, class, and gender.

Thompson Beverly Yuen 2015 Covered in Ink: Tattoos, Women, and the Politics of the Body New York University Press 9780814789209 WDeniseB (talk) 14:31, 6 April 2018 (UTC)

Hey WDeniseB! It's Threedeezeens from Feminist Art and Subculture. Here are some suggestions to help improve the tattoo wiki page:

To add:

-a paragraph/section on the various associations tattoos have depending on their location on the body, relationship to the body who owns it, content/style of the tattoo itself

- The "social skin" that engages the public, Tattoos are likened to keeping a journal/diary/blog, women are expected to adhere to the beauty ideal & tattoos, especially big ones defy that, unlike plastic surgery which is less visible, tattoos deny the invisibility of women as they age (I want to be covered” Heavily tattooed women challenge the dominant beauty culture)

-Janis Joplin’s wrist tattoo was one of the 1st publicly visible tattoos on a woman. Women mostly started out with small “feminine” tattoos. They had to be “small, cute, hidden”. Some women add tattoos to their bodies to enhance their confidence (I want to be covered” Heavily tattooed women challenge the dominant beauty culture)

-https://link.springer.com/article/10.1023/A:1021330609522

Can't wait to see the end result, happy editing! Threedeezeens (talk) 17:18, 17 April 2018 (UTC)threedeezeens

Feminist activism in hip hop (evaluation)
Notes: The lead in is solid but perhaps including a sentence about how feminist activism seeks to redefine the misogyny and sexism in hip hop will clarify that the article is not just about hip hop culture in a general sense.

The article has a consistently unbiased tone and the sources and presented objectively.

In the section titled "Hip Hop feminism" the first sentence of the second paragraph should be reworded for clarity. The sentence can also be taken out in its entirety as the following discussion of T. Hansan Johnson's book suffices to sum up the original points with a source to back it up.

Second to last paragraph under "Feminism in hip hop music" Beyoncé's name is spelled incorrectly in the second sentence, change Beyonce to Beyoncé. Do not change it the two times it is misspelled in the last paragraph as it is how the source for those points spells it and in turn acts as a quote. The first sentence of this paragraph should also be reworded for clarity and to correct the grammar in the statement "many have decried Beyoncé is not feminist enough." Changing it to "Many have claimed that Beyoncé and her work is not feminist enough" would suffice.

All of the citations and link to the works seem to be in order and working properly.

Developing the "Graffiti" section with a more detailed explanation of how women are marginalized within the graffiti subculture (similar to the explanation in the "Breakdancing" section) would explain why the all female graffiti crews are necessary.

The quote from Johnson in the "Breakdancing" section is formatted incorrectly and it is unclear where the quote ends and the general descriptions begin. The citation should also be moved to the end of the quote/discussion of Johnson's article. WDeniseB (talk) 00:16, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Yarn Bombing Evaluation
Many of the sections are underdeveloped and there is room for the specific content to be improved upon. Generally though, the grammar is solid and the tone is consistently unbiased.

Further developing the section "Motivation" to include the recent feminist activist motivations behind public yarn bombing or creating a section specifically about the connection to feminist subcultural practices would in it of itself help the article.

List examples of the different "agendas and public graffiti project" as their are many and further explaining them would offer more perspective on how wide and varied the Yarn Bombing community is and has become.

Including points about the reclamation of femininity through using a very traditionally feminine practice (knitting/crocheting) in conjunction with the rejection of femininity that many female street artists who work with more traditional mediums (paint, chalk, etc.) would offer another perspective of how yarn bombing came to be.

Continuing to discuss the differences between yarn bombing and other forms of street art in terms of their composition and processes would be beneficial.

Include a section on the environmental aspect of yarn bombing and the contention that exists over the negative impact that yarn bombing can have, especially when things like trees are "bombed." Much research has been developed on the impact that yarn bombing has on the environment and as yarn bombing is a subcultural practice closely related to feminist practices, including environmentalism. The connection between the two is inherently important to the article.

Include Yarn Bombing Los Angeles (YBLA) as an example in the section "History." They've contributed immensely to yarn bombing, especially in building a collective of yarn bomber activists.

WDeniseB (talk) 00:55, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Yarn Bombing Edits/Draft
Notes and general ideas on how I will edit the article "Yarn Bombing"

-include a section about the environmental impact Yarn Bombing can/does have (first draft done, source has been acquired.) Edit Draft: Yarn bombing has been under some scrutiny for the potential negative environmental impact that the yarn can have when placed on plant life. Yarn can restrict sap production on trees and constrict growth. [citation, on yarn bombing] It is considered proper yarn bombing etiquette to avoid "bombing" things like trees, bushes, and other plant life due to the negative impact it can have.

I have found a photo example of a yarn that was directly done on and in between parts of trees. I saved this to the article and will use it in the aforementioned section about yarn bombing and the environment. -Add different Yarn Bombing collectives and communities to the "History Section" (in progress, currently included YBLA)

-Include photo examples of feminist yarn bombing (search is in progress but no edits have been made)

-Include a section/note about the relationship between yarn bombing and other forms of street art, specifically the differences between the traditional femininity of knitting/crocheting and the traditionally masculine forms of street art. WDeniseB (talk) 01:13, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

More Edits/Drafting

source: http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/pdf/10.1177/0196859917753419 Knitting Feminist Politics: Exploring a Yarn-Bombing Performance in a Postdisaster City. Authors: Farinosi, Manuela

source: YBLA http://www.yarnbombinglosangeles.com/

source: Towards a politics of whimsy: yarn bombing the city. http://content.ebscohost.com/ContentServer.asp?T=P&P=AN&K=100800150&S=R&D=a9h&EbscoContent=dGJyMNLe80Sep7c4v%2BbwOLCmr1CeqK5SsKq4TbGWxWXS&ContentCustomer=dGJyMPGvrkivq7NNuePfgeyx44Dt6fIA Authors: Mann, Joanna WDeniseB (talk) 00:34, 20 April 2018 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW:Hi Will! It's Raine. I think Yarn Bombing is a great edit - and something you can do with this article that you can't really do with others is that you can add pictures you took yourself! There are some yarn bombs around campus - one near the SUB on the handle of the accessibility ramp. This might be a great place to illustrate. Also - maybe think about linking Yarn Bombing to the larger street art page if its not already - so it has a chance to be seen as legitimate street art! Rainegrayson (talk) 22:38, 21 April 2018 (UTC)

RESPONSE TO PEER REVIEW Hey Raine! Thank you so much for the suggestions, I think these all will be very helpful. Getting some more pictures as examples of yarn bombing will be really cool, and it could help with a section I've been considering drafting about the spaces that yarn bombing is majority done in/on. I've been playing around with how to connect Yarn bombing to the rest of the street art scene in a way that isn't too overly focused on other types of street art; I didn't want to turn it into a bunch of comparisons. I think your suggestion of linking it directly to the street art page(s) will be perfect! Thanks again! WDeniseB (talk) 16:10, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

Edits: Yarn bombing has become synonymous with the current feminist movement due in part to the reclamation of a traditionally feminine act (i.e. knitting and/or crocheting) to partake in the traditionally masculine and male-dominated graffiti scene.[4] The women and girls who make up the yarn bombing subculture are diverse in race, age, sexuality, class, etc. and create space for themselves and their art everywhere from college campuses to public parks. This creation and preservation of space is what motivates some of the participants, some of whom have never been able to access a political art space before. In her article about yarn bombing, Joanna Mann explains the balance between the art and politics, "Yarn bombing, I argue, does more than feminise the city, for the whimsy with which it is imbued has the capacity to increase our attentiveness to habitual worlds in a series of micro-political gestures." [5]

Yarn Bombing Los Angeles (YBLA) is a yarn bombing collective located in Los Angeles, CA. The collective describe themselves as a group of guerrilla knitters who have been collaborating since 2010. They hold monthly meetings to develop plans for events, share techniques, develop their collective community, etc. They currently have 10+ projects in progress throughout the Los Angeles and nearby communities.[21]

Environmental Impact Yarn bombing has been under some scrutiny for the potential negative environmental impact that the yarn can have when placed on plant life. Yarn can restrict sap production on trees and constrict growth.[22] It is considered proper yarn bombing etiquette to avoid "bombing" things like trees, bushes, and other plant life due to the negative impact it can have.


 * Basic Grammar* — Preceding unsigned comment added by WDeniseB (talk • contribs) 16:35, 6 May 2018 (UTC)