User talk:WJenos/sandbox

Hello Billy! I have completed your peer review. I am so sorry for the last minute post, I accidentally started to grade Brian's before realizing my mistake. here is the link. Ryienblackwood (talk) 15:53, 20 February 2020 (UTC)

Prof D feedback on draft
You've identified some great material to add to the original article. Remember, too, that the original needs some editing, especially the paragraph you've copied into your sandbox. Originally written by a student, it is wordy and contains awkward sentences. Feel free to make a major revision so that it more clearly fits with Wikipedia standards and guidelines. The same is true of the article lead. Currently, it does not give a summary of the article contents.

I like the idea of adding the historic structures. I would suggest stating at the beginning of the Evans Hall paragraph section that it no longer stands. Finish out the Thomas Hall paragraph by saying where it is (if it still exists) or clarify that it is no longer standing.

If neither of these buildings are still standing, you may want to combine this information into a single condensed paragraph about buildings that are no longer extant. It depends on the relevance of the information you have available.

You're making good use of the Siddons book, but you'll also want to incorporate other sources as well. Don't hesitate to use the National Register nomination form and freely edit/revise the existing paragraphs.

This is an essential piece of New London history and I'm looking forward to seeing your final draft. dddonald (talk) 15:51, 24 February 2020 (UTC)