User talk:WLHinATL2

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Some comments. Jimfbleak - talk to me?  06:38, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Note that when you publish this, the LLC should be omitted from the title, per MoS
 * I'd avoid "offers", which suggests an act of magnanimity, rather than what is presumably a commercial transaction.
 * This is different from traditional purchase program benefits, which can focus on a single kind of good or service or require payment up front.&mdash; without a source this looks like your opinion or WP:OR. Reference or remove
 * It's nowhere made clear how the company makes its money. Presumably they take some sort of commission, but that's not spelt out. It reads like a charitable act, but that's obviously not true, and the absence of any mention of how it trades makes it look spammy. Basically it's this is what we sell, but we are not going to tell you what's in it for us
 * On the same lack of transparency, I clicked on your infobox link to see what the company website says and got Access To Website Blocked (it was definitely the correct site, with the secure lock symbol). What kind of company hides its website from the general public?


 * I forgot to say that there is a prescribed format for declaring your COI, which in fairness you have been transparent about. You are  required by the Wikimedia Terms of Use to disclose your employer, client and affiliation. You should post such a mandatory disclosure to your user page at User:. The template Paid can be used for this purpose – e.g. in the form:     . Please provide the required disclosure. Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  06:45, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
 * The page under review is at User:WLHinATL2/sandbox. Jimfbleak noticed that he received 'Access to website blocked.' But when I checked https://www.purchasingpower.com I got through without having any access problems. In terms of how the company works, it is illuminating to check the reviews at https://www.facebook.com/pg/PurchasingPower/reviews. Of course this review page is not a reliable source for Wikipedia, but it does hint that customer service is a non-trivial task when you are trying to operate a third-party firm in between the customer and the vendor. If there are any published reviews of Purchasing Power in WP:Reliable sources it would be helpful to add them. Googling for 'Purchasing Power reviews' might eventually lead to some reliable sources. I found https://www.consumeraffairs.com/online/purchasing_power.html but don't think it qualifies as a reliable source. EdJohnston (talk) 02:50, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

Thank you both for your feedback. I worked with the team to adjust some wording and cited an external source for the business model. I also added a listing to my user page (thank you for the example) to document my COI. User:WLHinATL2/sandbox Do you think this is ready for submission? WLHinATL2 (talk) 19:36, 13 April 2018 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Purchasing Power, LLC (June 15)
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