User talk:WMidnight/Lipomyelomeningocele

Hey Jeff!

Overall great article on lipomyelomeningioceles! I really like and support the use of plain language in your description of the disease and treatments. This is not always easy, especially when considering the complexity of embryology, so very nice work.

I can't tell what your sources are at the moment, due to the method of uploading your draft to the sandbox, so I'm unable to assess them just yet. This is understandable since saving to and then transferring your article from a word processor is honestly a great idea.

During your description of the classifications of spinal lipomas, I noticed that you explained what the term "dorsal" indicates, but not what "caudal" does - a minor fix that I think would be worthwhile ;)

I expect that you were going to add pictures of imaging studies done for this condition under the "diagnosis" section, but if you weren't, I'd recommend it! It would be a great touch.

In the final paragraph, I would maybe clarify the meaning of supportive care in the management of the disease. Perhaps also consider making a subcategory for both conservative and surgical management, although this is not necessary and may not be the most effective considering how short the conservative section would be, but worth a try just to see :)

Again, strong work! I'm looking forward to seeing the finished and published article!

Hey Alex! Thank you for the feedback! I was afraid I was getting too bogged down in the details for the embryology section. I think its important to put and I am glad the language was clear. I think since you looked at the article the formatting was updated, and references are in progress! WMidnight (talk) 17:50, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Whoops yea, I was kinda confused as to where stuff was supposed to go so I looked at your sandbox proper and not the one for the page, sorry! I'll copy this over to the other page ;) But yes, the embryology section was well done! I found that despite my inability to remember most of embryology, I got a sense of what happens and what goes wrong to lead to this condition *thumbs up* Alexcentala (talk) 17:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)