User talk:Waggie/Archives/2018/August

Request for help on Draft:StorMagic
Hi, thanks for reviewing my article Draft:StorMagic so quickly after I resubmitted it. I was disappointed to see it had been declined again due to tone issues. I've declared my COI and have reviewed articles of other companies of a similar size and in the same industry such as DataCore and StarWind Software, both of which I believe appear much more like advertisements than the StorMagic page. I've made some additional edits today which hopefully help to resolve the tone problem, but if you feel they do not, can you please provide input as to how I can fix it? Thanks in advance. Crackers250 (talk) 10:34, 9 August 2018 (UTC)

Draft Functional Clothing

 * Hello Sir,

May i request you to review the draft, the link and material of that blog is removed.Please guide me further.Thanks and regardsRajiv Sharma (talk) 17:17, 22 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Hello, I do not review drafts more than once. It's better if I leave them for another reviewer to look things over. Waggie (talk) 15:20, 23 August 2018 (UTC)


 * No issues, appreciate your observations and advice. ThanksRajiv Sharma (talk) 17:34, 23 August 2018 (UTC)

Swift Xi
Hello sir,

I believe you helped me before to review my article. Could you please advise me what went wrong? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Masahiro007 (talk • contribs) 07:53, 21 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Hello . Yes, I did help you before. Your writing is promotional and you have not declared a conflict of interest. Things like "...established in 2018 to solve the social issues through accelerating innovation...The collaboration of 30 years of experience of Swift Engineering in designing and building high performance vehicles, specializing unmanned systems, autonomy, robotics and advanced composite..." read as highly promotional and are not suitable for Wikipedia. You do appear to have a conflict of interest (like you work for Swift Xi), and do not appear to have disclosed this. In addition, the image you uploaded appears to be a marketing photograph, but there's no evidence that you actually took this photo, even though you claim you did and released the rights to it. Waggie (talk) 14:37, 21 August 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your reply sir. I didn't actually try to write in a sense of promoting the page. In Japanese wiki page it has been written more in details. I just tried to summarized it in my own way as you advised. And as I mentioned before, I do not work for Swift xi. I am not an engineer. And the picture, it was on the internet as well as in Japanese wiki site. Thank you again for your kind guidance. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Masahiro007 (talk • contribs) 00:07, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Hello . So, you can confirm that you did not take the photo? And it was added to the Japanese wiki article by you. Where did you obtain the photo before you uploaded it to Wikipedia? Waggie (talk) 15:17, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Hello sir, I downloaded the picture from http://news.kobekeizai.jp/blog-entry-2188.html then edited it. Thank you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Masahiro007 (talk • contribs) 01:06, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Hello again, . As we've discussed prior, it isn't acceptable to copy content from other places on the internet. These are copyright violations, and breach US law. Thank you for your time, and best wishes to you. Waggie (talk) 02:05, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

Thank you sir. Can I add this file? https://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/スウィフト・エックスアイ#/media/File:SWIFT020.jpg — Preceding unsigned comment added by Masahiro007 (talk • contribs) 07:12, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

Continuing Page Creation
Hi!

Thank you for your message.. I was wondering how else I should proceed before submitting the page? What changes would you suggest?

Thank you!

Carson — Preceding unsigned comment added by Carsont93 (talk • contribs) 16:31, 29 August 2018 (UTC)

TDLYWNX (talk) 00:00, 30 August 2018 (UTC)Hello Waggie. It's TDLYWNX.

Hello to Waggie from TDLYWNX
Thank you to my patient mentor, Waggie! TDLYWNX (talk) 00:04, 30 August 2018 (UTC)TDLYWNX (29AUG2018)
 * , hi there! Looks good enough. Best wishes. Waggie (talk) 00:05, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
 * , researching further, it's worth noting that the NVCN website states "Originally designated as the Faith in Action National Network until 2011, when the name was changed in order to...". I've also started a new discussion on the article's talk page (scroll to the bottom) regarding the planned updates to the article, asking that other editors coordinate efforts there, if any should desire to assist in this process. Waggie (talk) 00:24, 30 August 2018 (UTC)