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I thought most of this article was relevant to the topic this group selected, my only comment about relevancy is in the history section. To me as a reader it seemed more geared towards the history of AIDS/HIV in the united states rather than Latin America. One thing that distracted me were the small words that could be replaced such as “was not” could be replaced with “wasn’t”.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

I would try to add (expand) on the transmission method section, didn’t seem very clear how the disease could spread from people (such as blood, saliva, mother to child, etc). Try to mention what the primary way to prevent transmission is in Latin America.

Overall evaluation

Good topic, it just needs to be more organized and use concise wording to get your point across to your readers. Again, if you can try to focus more on Latin America history for this topic it would be more relevant than the united states history. Also, sure to go through and check for grammar and spelling errors. Iveshm2648 (talk) 03:30, 25 November 2019 (UTC)iveshm2648