User talk:Wakefjl1/sandbox

For this article, I would first recommend not having as many direct quotes. While they can be very useful in getting a message across, Wikipedia recommends using your own words as a part of the plagiarism section. I also recommend working on the formatting of your article - for example, instead of using traditional forms of citation (Last name, page number), it would be better to use the "cite" function built into Wikipedia. That makes it a lot cleaner and also auto-makes a references section for you. Also for the formatting, there are ways to make section headers just to make it a bit easier to follow. Lastly the content so far is good and I know we're just beginning but I'd love to see more detailed explanations as to what this means for Malawi.

Peer Review

 * First of all, it's unclear which article is being edited here, and what is the edit.
 * In general, use the Wikipedia sentence-specific citations instead of parentheses. You can do this by pushing the cite button when you're editing. This will go a long way to making it more understandable what you're pulling information from.
 * There appears to be a quote bank at the top of the sandbox, but it is unclear how these pertain to your article. If this is not a quote bank, but instead a paragraph, remember that Wikipedia is supposed to be your own words, not quotes.
 * The first sentence of the paragraph is very unclear for those without background knowledge. It's somewhat run-on and the mentioning of three political parties gets confusing. Perhaps split the first sentence into two? The third sentence is also two long. The first part makes sense about the prohibition of parties during Banda's reign. The second half needs a quick grammar tweak--drop the which so that the sentence has a verb. "The Public Affairs Committee consisted of..."
 * Finally, an "About Us" page from a political party's own site is probably not a reliable source.
 * All in all, looks like a good start but could use some clarification. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jmtate136 (talk • contribs) 23:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)