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Walshnic/Zara Review/Feedback
The edited section was easy to read and follow. The citations were thorough and had various resources cited from different times. However, at first glance, I wasn't clear that the exception section was only for New Zealand. If the paragraph started with a blurb to connect with the previous section that would make it easier to understand the two sections belong with each other. I eventually figured it out pretty quickly but when I clicked the exception section on the top and started reading I wasn't quiet clear about the relation to New Zealand.

Thanks so much for the feedback, I have re-ordered the information around so it flows better and added a table of contents and headings.--Walshnic (talk) 02:14, 15 July 2018 (UTC)