User talk:Walter.l.smith/sandbox/Black land loss in the United States

Ayana's Peer Review
I like how this article breaks down the issue of black land loss chronologically and details all the events that occurred in different eras that resulted in black land loss or aided it. I think you could make your lead section a lot more neutral. I feel like it does two things that you can change. One it starts the article off using some biased key words. Eliminate words like "pro-white" and sticking to words that describe solely the increase or decrease of black land loss. Don't take a stance. Also, I feel like you lead summarizes everything you wrote in your article in chronological order, but instead maybe try just giving a focused definition and maybe a bit of context on what black land loss is, rather than stating the events that were associated with it? I feel like for a reader who is clueless about black land loss, a definition would help before a timeline. I would also love to see more about how the USDA contributed to black land loss. That section was very brief. Overall nice job! You covered a lot of history and used a good amount of sources.

Sheena's peer review
Hello,

I think your draft is very well written and the separate categories with the dates was a great way to organize the information. I think it would be helpful to just elaborate some more on what black land loss definition and maybe some general examples, just so when the reader comes to the history of black land loss they might have a better understanding when reading that portion. Other than that, your draft was very straight forward and clear and by the end of the article I had a good idea of the history of black land loss. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Susiechonai (talk • contribs) 18:13, 20 October 2017 (UTC)