User talk:Waltzer.l/sandbox

Hi Leo, this is a very interesting topic. First of all the organization is great, good use of the headings and subheading, the structural is easy to follow and clear. The content definitely covers the existing gap of the article, you added a good range of relevant information that will help enhance the existing article. The tone used is appropriate for the wikipedia audience, the information is presented in a neutral viewpoint, there is no bias in the data that you had presented in the article. The only section you might be able to further expand on is the "regulation" section, it is a little short compared to the other sections, maybe explain why only four antibiotics can be used, if you can find information on that. Also, remember to add in the citations and the references in the final draft as the current draft does not have any annotation to it. Overall, a really good start to the project, I'm sure the final version will be great! A.yap (talk)

Hey Leo! Right off the bat, this article was pleasing to look at. The table of contents is laid out in an easy-to-navigate fashion, starting with the introduction of topics you added to the original article, then leading into a good thesis to start off the article in "FDA and risk assessment." The whole article seems coherent and is organized well to fit the context of transfer mechanisms, leading into effects on humans. In addition, your newly added sections don't seem to duplicate/replicate the original article, which is good. The tone also stays neutral throughout the article, not introducing any bias. I don't think pictures will be necessary to add since there aren't really representative pictures on this topic. However, one section I would look over is "Vectors" since the text in that section does not address vectors specifically. It does detail transmission between insects and its effects, which strengthens the impact of the section. Overall, nicely done, I would just finish up and include the sources for the final draft!Joon Hong (talk) 23:49, 21 June 2018 (UTC)