User talk:Wanbiao/sandbox

Some citations are missing in the article should be added. Redox of phosphorus can be found in article of “Figueroa, I. A., and J. D. Coates. "Microbial phosphite oxidation and its potential role in the global phosphorus and carbon cycles." In Advances in applied microbiology, vol. 98, pp. 93-117. Academic Press, 2017.”. Usage of phosphorus by organisms can cite “Ruttenberg, K. C., The Global Phosphorus Cycle. In Treatise on Geochemistry (Second Edition), Turekian, K. K., Ed. Elsevier: Oxford, 2014; pp 499-558.”.

Lead Section
The lead section of Phosphorus cycle page (not included in your sandbox) gives a good overview of the cycle. It describes that the atmosphere does not play an important role in this biogeochemical cycle, which is simple but important information for the viewers. I think the lead section is good with its first paragraph, and the remaining two paragraphs could be deleted and included in the proper subsections.

Structure
Second paragraph of the section "Process of the cycle" seems too long for the viewers. This paragraph could be divided into two separate (and shorter) paragraphs, with the second paragraph focusing on phosphorus in water. A possible break-point would be after the fifth sentence. It will be easier to read and understand if the paragraphs were shorter. There is a typo in the second sentence of third paragraph (additional R in the word "Recently"). It is also recommended to keep the format of numbering in your article as one type - you used "i)" and "(i)" in your second paragraph.

Balanced Coverage
Although the first [Ruttenberg, 2014] and fifth reference [Paytan and McLaughlin, 2007] were cited multiple times in the article, the aspects were generally balanced throughout. Your article covers about the process of the phosphorus cycle more in depth compared to the original section in the wikipedia page. There is no off-topic contents found in your article. It would be great if you can add a sentence or two about the "critical roles" of "transformation of iron oxide-bound phosphorus to vivianite" with some details.

Neutral Contents
Your article seems very neutral. There is no extreme words, such as "best", "most", or "obvious" found in the article. Sentences were kept to be informative but not persuasive, making the article to be neutral.

Reliable Sources
Your sources seem all reliable, as you used papers published on peer-reviewed scientific journals, including Science. For the sixth [Kraal et al., 2017] and seventh reference [Defforey and Paytan, 2018] you used (as of 3/29/2019), there is an error posted with date values - you can either add the day or get rid of the month to fix this error. Papers that are cited in your articles are published within the past 12 years, so I safely assume that these contents are up to date.

Final Comments
As you wrote in the evaluation section, I also believe that the page should talk more about the cycle of phosphorus in nature. Overall, phosphorus cycle page will look much better when your "Process of the cycle" section is added to the page. Nice work! I look forward to seeing the updated wikipedia page of phosphorus cycle once the project is finished. Let me know if there is any question or comment on my review, I'm Patrick! --Windyor (talk) 20:38, 29 March 2019 (UTC)