User talk:Washingtondc1234

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Your submission at Articles for creation
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 * Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! Excirial ( Contact me, Contribs ) 21:06, 19 July 2012 (UTC)

Financial Services Institute
Hi Excirial,

Thank you for providing feedback for the page I am creating on the Financial Services Institute. I just had a quick question in hopes that the page gets approved as I've put quite a bit of time and research into it.

My username is Washingtondc1234 and the link to my page is here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia_talk:Articles_for_creation/Financial_Services_Institute

I guess my big question is rather general, but this is the second time that I have been denied due to the page reading like an advertisement. Can you provide specific examples where this is the case? I've tried to cite everything that I've gathered from the sources listed to give credit and am just simply not sure where to go next. Is it the general tone or are there specific words I should avoid? Any specific advice I would greatly appreciate.

Thank you!


 * Hello there Washingtondc1234,


 * I can definitely point out a few examples for you, but i would note that the article's overall structure and tone is rather biased, rather then having a few promotional lines in it. Since this is an article detailing a company, i would recommend modeling it after a GA qualified article, since these have been checked for quality of writing, references et cetera. My favorite examples are Pearson's Candy Company and Pike Place Fish Market, because they are well written decently referenced, while also being quite short (thus reading them doesn't take ages)


 * Now, a few examples:
 * The Recent victories section as a whole. Most times a "recent accomplishment" section is not a good idea in the first place, since they are inherently promotional, and prone to aging (If no one updates the section in 10 years, it will still say recent accomplishments). Also, calling it recent "victories" is... even less neutral.
 * The FSI Leadership Team suffers from the same sort of issue.
 * It is promotional in tone. For example: "And brings broad leadership experience to FSI (peacock wording), non neutral) and Mr. Brown is regularly recognized as one of the most influential people in the investment advisory business" (Advertising) are lines that are a definate no-go.
 * It suffers from undue weight. Right now the entire financial institute and origins section is about 200 words long, which this section is 500+ words long. In other words i would conclude that these 4 persons are about 2.5 times more important than anything else the organization has ever done in its entire existence. This is of course a jest, but the issue is all the same. In fact the leadership team of an organization is only hardly ever covered in a company article. Either they are notable enough for a stand-alone article, or they receive a footnote in an infobox of some sort. There are some exceptions to this rule, but in general a management team doesn't warrant a separate section.
 * Finally i note that in the latest revision (as of writing) the references are gone. Your using named references which is always good, but the last revision contains only named references without content. Guess that was a mistake?


 * Kind regards, Excirial ( Contact me, Contribs ) 18:05, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

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Your draft article, Wikipedia talk:Articles for creation/Financial Services Institute


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Draft:Financial Services Institute concern
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Your draft article, Draft:Financial Services Institute


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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. HasteurBot (talk) 16:00, 15 July 2015 (UTC)