User talk:WavesOfAmur/St Petersburg Second Edit

05/09/2019 Evaluation by Joshua Gramley
Hi, Kirill! Really lovely detail here. I appreciate the amount of effort you put into this.

Spelling/Grammar nearly meets standards. Some potential edits: 1. Sentence 4, overview section: I understand your phrasing with these commas, but a less-than-careful reading produces a slightly disjointed, confusing experience. Might consider rephrasing a bit to remove the necessity for some of those commas. 2. Throughout your text, there are incidences of using the past perfect tense when simple past tense seems like a better choice. Here are some examples, with proposed changes:

"...and other forms of architectural splendor built in Imperial Russia, that had been destroyed during the Siege of Leningrad, [were] restored by the Soviet authorities, so as to preserve "expressions of Russian culture and craftsmanship"." (First past perfect is good, changed second incidence to simple past)

"After Soviet collapse of the early 1990s, Cooper and Morpeth (1998) asserted that St. Petersburg had [begun] to look..." (changed first instance to simple past; second instance corrected irregular past-tense verb)

Language nearly meets standards. Potential edits: 1. Sentence 3, overview section: Peter the Great doesn't intuitively carry over as the subject into this sentence, since in the previous sentence, he's not the subject, but rather, part of (what I believe is called) a subordinate clause. So instead of starting sentence three with "He," you might need to reference Peter the Great again directly, although using that title repeatedly might be awkward, so you might do better simply referring to him as "the Tsar" (i.e., "The Tsar believed...") 2. Sentence beginning with Gogol: I believe you may want the word "alleged" instead of "alluded." Also, punctuation like commas and periods typically falls within parenthesis, at least in American English (format doesn't seem to be clarified on the Wiki page). 3. Sentence beginning "Many other architectural features": I believe you want "renowned" rather than "renown" (adjective versus noun here). 4. UNESCO World Heritage: I believe the "site" is capitalized here, too (so, "UNESCO World Heritage Site")

Organization meets standards. Quick question: the text in section called "Literature" seems more related to academic studies. What do you think about using a different heading here--perhaps "Education," or "Academic Institutions"?

Coding meets standards.

Validity meets standards. Information seems sound. All claims are thoroughly cited. Especially in the last section, you do a really nice job of including a lot of perspective and opinion into this, while clearly representing it as perspective and opinion (rather than conflating it with fact). You end up with a really good portrait of what is happening, and what people think about what is happening.

Completion exceeds standards; obviously overachieving here! But it's all really good information, so seems like it was a really worthwhile investment.

Relevance exceeds standards. Nothing feels superfluous, and the level/diversity of detail you include is, again, a real strong point with your article.

Citations meets standards. I'm curious about the APA-style publication date in-text citations you use here--for instance, following "Cooper and Morpeth". Is that Wikipedia convention? I don't feel like I've seen it before, but I'm aware that there are formatting style specifics for specific occasions. Would be interested to hear your answer on this one--if I should be doing it myself, I'd like to adapt my practice.

Sources meets standards. Looks like a lot of good sources here, and you have the requisite 10.

References meets standards; everything here looks good.

Again, really nice work here, Kirill! The St. Petersburg page will improve with your contribution. Joshua Gramley (talk) 01:37, 14 May 2019 (UTC)

5/11/2019 Evaluation by User:BethanyJJohnson
Points: 33.5 Grade: 84%

Spelling/Grammar -3

Several sentences were hard to read, or run-on sentences.

"In the mid-18th century, the city began to adopt the baroque style, as well as implementing parts of rococo style, into its architecture, and by the 19th century, as with the rest of European cities at the time, it had adapted to classicism, as well." Maybe consider breaking this up in to two sentences?

Language - 4

Meets standards

Organization - 3

I would move the 'architecture' section to be under 'cityscape'

Coding - 3

There are several places throughout the article that could still use links to other wiki articles.

Validity - 4

Meets standards

Completion - 4

Meets standards

Relevance - 3

I'm not sure how relevant the literature section is with the rest of the article.

Sources - 4.5

Several academic sources

Citations - 4

Meets standards

References - 4

Several solid references

BethanyJJohnson (talk) 04:30, 12 May 2019 (UTC)

6/3/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 14:29, 3 June 2019 (UTC)

This really is great stuff!!
 * Points: 41/40
 * Grade: 102.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * "...it had adapted to classicism, as well." Omit comma.
 * "Conversely, in 1880's, the..."
 * ...in the 1880s...
 * Omit second comma and the apostrophe.
 * Leave 'the' out of the link.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "...architectural wonders..." is close to being non-neutral language.
 * Occasional awkward wording.

Organization
Meets standard. Your paragraphs are rather long. The first one you could break it up, creating a new paragraph starting with "In contemporary times..."

Coding
Meets standard.
 * Baroque architecture and Rococo ought to have been linked.
 * Is 'European Renaissance urbanism' a concept that might also have a page on Wikipedia, so that it can be clearer what you mean?

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Exceeds standard. This is a great deal of awesome material.

Relevance
Exceeds standard. This stuff really belongs on the St. Petersburg page. I really hope you will add it.

Reference examples
St. Petersburg is a city built of many historical, culturally affluent sites. It is oftentimes described as the 'Venice of the North' for its grandiose architecture, art, and history. [...] In the mid-18th century, the city began to adopt the baroque style, as well as implementing parts of rococo style into its architecture. By the 19th century, as with the rest of European cities at the time, it had adapted to classicism, as well. Nevsky Prospect, generally considered to be the main street of the city, has many architectural wonders containing these styles. Nikolai Gogol was alleged to have once said that "Earth has nothing finer to show than this street," due to the amount of architectural ingenuity, as well as the bustling number of people, that persists along this street. In the 19th Century, Tsar Alexander I built a number of different churches, palaces, and columns in celebrating the Russian victory over Napoleon. Conversely, in 1880's, the Church of the Saviour on Blood was built on the spot of where Tsar Alexander II was killed.