User talk:Wciupa/sandbox

Things to improve
Try adding some wiki-links throughout your article. Also try and expand upon the early/high school career, if you can find that information it would be really cool to see how his stats in high school translated into his college stats. I would also add in maybe some information about where his high school is and how big it is, this will add great background information to your article. In the start of your second body paragraph, try saying For his first year of eligibility, Dre'Mont Jones decided to red-shirt his freshman season.Ashkupka (talk) 17:02, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Improvements
Maybe add another heading that is not about his career and add information about his personal life and family background.MaM4213 (talk) 14:05, 23 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback
I would add more information in the lead so that it allows more of an introduction for the reader. You have multiple headers which allows your page to be organized. You are very balanced with your information and provide many outside references to help with your credibility. MaM4213 (talk) 16:42, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback
The introductory paragraph is very very small, so try to add to it and look at other football players to base it off of them. All of the topics are in a good order and all of them retain a neutral tone throughout. All of your content is relevant to your topic and I would only say that you should try to add an image of him if you can find one. I like your citations, i haven't tried them out yet but I will later to make sure they work. Overall, minor edits will fix things and its a really good start to an article.Ashkupka (talk) 17:00, 24 October 2018 (UTC)