User talk:Whitney.ryan/sandbox

Please leave me comments with your signature, thank you! Whitney.ryan (talk) 20:43, 22 January 2014 (UTC)

Feedback on article
Like most others, this group needs to proofread carefully. Lots of grammatical errors. For example, what's wrong with this sentence?: "Her and Watson had goals of altering people's family lives, so that it reflected a scientific laboratory, in that behaviors could be conditioned and controlled." Other errors include same sentence appearing twice in last para under publications.

Also - are you sure that's a picture of Rayner? Looks like Watson in the beard to me.

Rating = 2. Needs more work, but shouldn't be too tough. This will be a nice addition to the existing article. J.R. Council (talk) 18:57, 30 April 2014 (UTC)

Dr. Council- We have incorporated the old Wiki article with our current article on Rosalie Rayner. We incorporated a lot of the old article's ideas, as well as the brief intro at the beginning of the page. We used two of their sources when transferring information! As far as a photo goes, I haven't found one of Rayner that allows reuse. Whitney.ryan (talk) 16:04, 6 May 2014 (UTC)

Almost there
This paper still needs to be proofread carefully. Here are some examples:

Here she studied alongside Mary Cover Jones, another prominent woman psychologist whose focus was on lifetime development. Better - Here she studied alongside Mary Cover Jones, who would become a prominent woman psychologist whose focus was on lifetime development.

Behaviorism was a term that Watson had forced into the field of psychology - introduced is a better term

In her time at John Hopkins, her and Watson studied over 500 children - she and Watson

In today's time, the "Little Albert" study - Today, ...

This study got published - was

Just make these corrections and you're ready to publish. Remember, don't erase what's there already. I know you copied it into your sandbox, but work around the existing article. Nice job on this! J.R. Council (talk) 17:29, 6 May 2014 (UTC)

All of those corrections have been made!

--Heatherjanderson (talk) 22:11, 6 May 2014 (UTC)Heather Anderson

Time to publish!
Looks good - nice work! Let me know when you publish. J.R. Council (talk) 22:28, 6 May 2014 (UTC)