User talk:Whoisstephanie/sandbox

Chandler's Peer Review
When reading this I feel no bias or particular tone and I believe you are following all the wikipedia guidelines. I think you could create a stronger intro sentence, like lead the readers into the topic, not so much just throw it at them. I think you should make a split and make a second paragraph when you start discussing why asian americans are more likely to develop type 2 diabetes, specifically “having no access to health insurance…” Also, I think you could further explain that because i think that is a very important and current issue.