User talk:Wikinerd03/Carnival of Venice

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Nice start on your draft. A few things going forward
 * 1) Be precise in your language. For example: when the Senate of the Republic of Venice decided to enact the extravaganza. It would be better to say "enacted", because the decision to enact legislation isn't the thing that makes it happen. Also, I presume the senate would enact legislation, not a festivity. Finally, "extravaganza" isn't the best descriptive term here. "Festival" or "celebration" would be better as they're more neutral descriptors; "extravaganza" is sort of exaggerated language.
 * 2) Don't add opinions or commentary like Notably,..., or Remarkably... Sticking to factual statements is best. Also avoid language like commendable celebrations or Venice could be likened to modern-day Las Vegas, where parties never seem to come to an end. If a source expresses these opinions, you can attribute the opinion to that source, but never put it in Wikipedia's voice. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:16, 8 December 2020 (UTC)