User talk:Willow333/Exploitation of women in mass media

Peer Review #1 11/29/23
Lead: The lead has been updated and cleaned up. It has a concise and clear definition of the topic. Unnecessary information about the history was eliminated for example about the Parisian ballerinas. It includes a partial brief description of the article's major sections but it missing some sections for example: women in mass media such as television, film, music, and advertising as objects or sexual beings,

Television Are you moving the existing section to follow the lead? Are you planning to make any edits?

Film This section has been updated and cleaned up. It should follow Television section.

Music and Music Videos Are you planning to make any edits?

Advertising Are you planning to make any edits? This section should follow music.

Social Media can be added to the first sentence

Pronography this section could be placed in the film section or Societal Effects section.

Societal Effects section could also include the original articles sections and re organize the structure.

Content: The content is relevant to the topic and has been updated. New sections have been added and include examples and reliable sources. Great job!

Tone and Balance: With the message: The neutrality of this article is disputed you were challenged with cleaning up the existing content and presenting in a neutral way. I believe you accomplished this by citing reliable sources. You did a lot of research and understand the topic. Excellent work!

(~) GS2325 (talk) 17:48, 29 November 2023 (UTC)