User talk:Wontakkim/sandbox

From what I can tell you have found and added sources for the “Activity Profile” list. As well as added “Metabotropic Glutamate Receptor” bullet. You also have created two paragraphs for the Alcohol intoxication page. I think that you have added some really good information and putting the sources on the list is a great addition. It was a little difficult to follow all that you worked on because it is scattered on several pages. Also your two paragraphs are a little difficult to follow as well. They feel very choppy, and I don’t think a first time/general user will be able to understand them. You have good references for the list but I don’t see any for the paragraphs you created. Here are a few suggestions that I have.

•	You don’t really explain what the nucleus accumbens (NAcc) is. Explaining this will help connect the rest of your paragraph

•	The second two sentences seem to be saying the same thing

•	It seems like there needs to be a transition when you start talking about mGluR7

•	This sentence, “It was of interest to determine drug actions on these receptors, and we investigated the effects of ethanol, halothane, the anesthetic compound F3 (1-chloro-1,2,2-trifluorocyclobutane), and the nonanesthetics F6 (1,2-dichlorohexafluorocyclobutane) and F8 (2,3-chlorooctafluorobutane) on the function of mGluR1 and mGluR5 expressed in Xenopus laevis oocytes.” sounds like a quote from a research paper it is also very technical and might be to technical for general Wikipedia users

•	Ethanol at the beginning of the second paragraph needs to be capitalized

•	In your second paragraph I feel like there needs to be a transition when you start talking about learning and memory

•	The second paragraph seem to jump from topic to topic, maybe rewording some of the sentences to help general readers follow the main ideas

•	There are no sources for your paragraphs, or if there are they aren’t shown as inline citations

•	I don’t see your image that you are going to add in your sandbox?

Overall I think that you have done a good job satisfying all the criteria.