User talk:Wpmisters/sandbox

Everything is very well written and flows great! The font size and type kind of throws off the flow of the abstract for epidemiology, but the summary is great! In the diagnosis section, maybe elaborate how each genetic test works. See if there are more articles on recent research to summarize. I really liked how you kept the mechanism in simple terms, very easy to follow. Ppatel91 (talk) 18:15, 12 November 2017 (UTC)Priya Patel

Abbey Ekong Overall, your organization and presentation is very nice. I would just go into more detail in each section to show a deep understanding of your disease. Epidemiology (capitalize) and you could go into more detail in this section about how acid lipase disease relates to the 3 diseases. It is also kind of confusing to understand how acid lipid disease is connected to the other diseases and how the lysosomal acid lipid enzyme is related. You can clarify and draw more connections throughout the article. Diagnosis-are the results you listed expected for a person with or without the disease (it is not clear to me). Good start to article! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aekong2011 (talk • contribs) 16:48, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Overall, this looks like it is off to a great start! I like writing in the epidemiology section in the abstract, but changing the font size/type of the heading might help with the visual flow of that section. I think the mechanism section looks good so far, but it would be helpful to have a little more detail regarding how the lack of this enzyme leads to this disease. In the symptoms section you mention Wolman disease and Cholesteryl ester storage disease—maybe include information regarding these two and that they are linked to acid lipase disease earlier on (like in the abstract) as well. The recent research, diagnosis, and causes and prevention section could use a little more elaboration if more information is available! -ArtiAp1317 (talk) 16:52, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Sweiner02 (talk) 21:06, 26 November 2017 (UTC)
 * No heading needed for abstract.
 * All headings should be capitalized.
 * Use commas in large numbers for clarity.
 * Nice, clear abstract.
 * Mechanism: You told me what happens normally. What happens in this disease?
 * Great job including consistent linking to other pages.
 * Talk about the findings of research, not the titles. Just cite articles normally. More research should be included
 * Reference 1 is not properly formatted. Lesser issues with some other references.