User talk:Wsprad74/Fort Union National Monument (History of the fort section)

Peer Review
Looks like you have a strong outline for what you want to do with your project. You most likely already have this in mind but the article would benefit from additional sources, especially from people involved with the fort such as personal accounts/records, and illustrations/photographs of the fort and the monument. ErichAns (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

Feedback from Dr. Hyde
'''You’ve gotten a start here on adding really important information to the history sections. The two key issues, now, are adding more text in general, but also citations to good, scholarly sources.'''

1)    Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite.

'''I can see where you are planning to go with this and I think those sections will be an important addition to the article. You might want to divide up the “Article Body” into separate chunks, like “Early History and Indigenous Communities” and “Fort Union 1” and “Fort Union 2” to help readers see what is going on from the start. I think you need more information about the U.S. Army in the early West.'''

2)    Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)

'''You need more books and articles: I suggested some general military histories earlier, but here are more. . . Frazier, Donald S. (1995). Blood and Treasure: The Confederate Empire in the Southwest. College Station, Texas: Texas A & M University Press; Cutrer, Thomas W. Theater of a Separate War. Chapel Hill: U of North Carolina, 2017. (OU ONLINE) I think you just need to dig around in those books and use their bibliographies and indexes effectively.'''

3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add

'''A little thin. I can see where you plan to take this, but the key task is decided how to lay out the history of the U.S. Army in the region and why Fort Union was particularly important to the Civil War but also the Indian wars in the region.'''

4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background

'''Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles. I think you need more links to battles, other forts, and Indigenous nations in the region.'''

5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs

You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while.

GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 70/80

Afh1858 (talk) 16:50, 12 November 2023 (UTC)