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Some revisions necessary. Chronophoto (talk) 01:09, 20 February 2018 (UTC) (course instructor)
 * You have some great information here.
 * Fix formatting of reference #4 and add more information in reference #6.
 * When you reference other filmmakers and organizations that are in Wikipedia, make sure to make them into links to those pages.
 * Fix some small grammatical and spelling errors.
 * Book titles and TV show titles should be in italics not quotations.

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You have a lot of well researched information in this article, and it really shows the breadth of Carroll Parrot Blue's work as being much more than a filmmaker. Some small suggestions would be to put things in chronological order. For example, the section on her early life before the section on her career, and there was award she won in 2004, put that before her work as a professor at the University of Huston which she did after 2004. (Or you could consider making adding that to the awards section on her Wikipedia page, instead of having it in her career section. Also, this is very minor, but the Los Angeles School seems vague, is there more to that title? And expand MFA (I'm guessing Master of Fine Arts, but someone not in school might not be familiar with that acronym).

Violathompson (talk) 18:07, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

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Really good article with a lot of information! You also have great sources. I think you should structure the information you have just so everything is organized and clear. You should make it in chronological order and have the information about her personal life come first, then continue with her filmography. Sunesune123 —Preceding undated comment added 19:36, 25 February 2018 (UTC)