User talk:XMNboy

Response

 * Response at my talk page Jeepday (talk) 01:49, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

TenAsys
It is looking better, and anyone can remove the tags once the issue has been addressed. Though in practice and for etiquette it is best not to remove them yourself since you wrote the article. That way a third party has looked it over and agreed the issue has been addressed. With the notability, I think its there, but anytime you can add more mainstream media outlets try to do so as it makes it easier for lay people to better see that the company is notable.

As to the article itself, see NW Natural for a good example of a WP:LEAD section and a history section. This company may not have as long of a history and the sections would be shorter, but it shows the type of info to have in those sections. Also, try for a more neutral word than "exploit" as that comes across as a little ra ra ra, which is part of the "ad" template issue. In general, most of that has been cleaned up, so I'm going to change the tag, but there is still some neutrality issues, in that the article reads like a product catalog and not an encyclopedia entry. If the company has struggled, fined by the government, etc. then it should be added, as should more mundane issues as who is the CEO/president, where is it located (add it in the body, not just the infobox) in both offices and if separate (as is common these days) where are the manufacturing facilities. And about the location, is it actually in Beaverton? Beaverton does not exist west of 185th, and that's where the company is, which means it is in Hillsboro, despite the address and zip code. Hillsboro annexed the area in the late 1980s when it was all part of the Oregon Graduate Center (which became OGI and then OHSU). In general see neighbor Planar System's talk page for info on the boundaries. So once these have been addressed, drop me a note and I'll take a look. Happy editing. Aboutmovies (talk) 06:30, 29 April 2009 (UTC)