User talk:Xintong Di/sandbox

Hi! This is Amy, one of your peer reviewers. Thank you for your patience with my own draft! I'm just wondering, what's the difference between food contaminants and food contamination? I think a bit more explanation would help me understand. I like that you include references throughout your draft; great work with those. Additionally, your categories and headers are clear and break down the topic into easily-understandable chunks. However, some of your wording is confusing/unclear. I would suggest you read your writing out loud to yourself to make sure it flows and is grammatically correct. It might also be helpful to have a friend read through it. For example, the sentence "In the process of production, transportation, packaging, storage, sales and cooking process, food Contamination happens when food are corrupted with another substance." I would perhaps break this down into two sentences, and reword them both individually. "Food contamination happens when food is corrupted with another substance. This can occur in the process of production, transportation..." etc. Overall, great start to your Wikipedia article! -Amybarch (talk) 20:54, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

Hello! This is Brittney Your other peer reviewer. I really like that you decided to create this specific page and your three categories right now are well organized and easy to understand. I think it could be really helpful to talk about the consequences of food contamination since that is probably what most people googling it are concerned about. This is definitely a good starting point for the page but I think it would benefit from additional information. Maybe a section on food contaminations throughout history? I know there have been some massive recalls even in the past decade of certain foods!(talk)