User talk:Xkwhvzde/Immigrant surveillance

Peer Edit Notes (Obtusesquare): - I like how you give/will give historical context of how policies developed! super important to understand how immigrant surveillance came to be in this country - it would be important to present this suggested section carefully and neutrally, but I think a section on how immigrant surveillance can become easily racialized or perhaps it already is (since you mention racial profiling), would be important to this conversation (ie, which groups are targeted the most, how useful do these surveillance methods actually lead to incrimination, etc ... there's actually interesting research that shows immigrants have the lowest crime-rates, particularly undocumented folx) - maybe include some positives! like what are some movements/important leaders advocating for change/trying to fix this system and protect immigrant privacy Obtusesquare (talk) 21:19, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review by MooCow1
Third sentence in lead section: "Immigration surveillance ties into into social issues..." the word "into" is repeated. What does this mean: "the federal government had the absolute right to deport non-citizens because it was not a criminal proceeding but an administrative one."? What are/were the implications of passing ATSA for immigrants? The second paragraph under "State Surveillance" has a lot of different ideas in it. First you talk about ATSA, then the Immigrant Nationality Act. Are these two things linked? If so, state how, and if not, I'd recommend separation these two ideas into different paragraphs. If possible, I'd discuss privacy more in the "state surveillance" section. You should have a citation for the first part of the "Fourth amendment" section, especially when discussing interpretation of the right and the exemptions when laws are being broken. For the "Controversies" section, I would suggest explaining each more. There are some terms that can be explained in more detail or just in general, more context could be given for each situation described.

MooCow1 (talk) 01:31, 1 December 2017 (UTC)