User talk:Yamcosh/Renewable energy in the Philippines

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I plan to expand upon the second small paragraph and discuss how hydropower plants affect local communities and the environment.Yamcosh (talk) 17:52, 21 March 2022 (UTC)

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 * To link this section to the lead of the Wikipedia article, you can add a topic sentence, which states that hydropower has been considered one of the main sources for renewable energy by the Philippines. If you want to make a citation, you can use information in the first paragraph of section #1.2 in this source: Gulagi, Ashish, Myron Alcanzare, Dmitrii Bogdanov, Eugene Esparcia Jr, Joey Ocon, and Christian Breyer. "Transition pathway towards 100% renewable energy across the sectors of power, heat, transport, and desalination for the Philippines." Renewable and Sustainable Energy Reviews 144 (2021): 110934. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.rser.2021.110934
 * In terms of structure, place all "positive" impacts in one paragraph and the "negatives" in another. Two sentences from the second paragraph can be moved up to the first paragraph. And I think it is fine to place it at the end of the current version of the first paragraph.
 * "Many areas of the Philippines are suitable for hydroelectricity production."
 * "Isolated mountain communities have seen improvements..."

Overall, I'm happy with this editing work. Please reply Yes to acknowledge that you read my message. Thanks! Hieup (talk) 21:27, 6 April 2022 (UTC)hieup
 * It is quite interesting that you provide 3 sources for the fact in the second sentence of the first paragraph. If all sources you find address the same statistics, that's great. I would not cite source #7 (about Mindanao) for this statement though.
 * "The methods of using ..." => if you only have one source for this statement, it'd better to write it in a less absolute way. For instance, "The methods of using ... often/tend to..." (Note: Yes, it might sound "biased" but to keep information more accurate, we do need to actually "impose" some of our assessment.)
 * "However, incorporating small scale plants,..." ==> I would take out the word "However" in this sentence.
 * The last paragraph looks great.