User talk:Yanyra562/Gay parenting

Hello Yanyra, Your article is very interesting. There were some grammatical errors I found and also some phrasing that didn't make sense, that needs to be reworded. When using citations you should use the Wikipedia style/format, which has a super-sub script blue number at the end of the sentence that you are quoting. I uploaded a word doc. with suggestions into your final google project folder.M1996G (talk) 22:42, 28 April 2021 (UTC)

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You have a substantial addition here, Yanyra562, and a lot of good feedback from classmates to consider. It seems as though you are considering adding a history section to the article, correct? Where do you plan to place it? I would keep the subtitle simpler--something like "History of gay parenting in courts." Then I would edit substantially for both conciseness and neutrality. For example, lines such as "felt empowered to take charge of their own lives" is hardly neutral. Because this is taken from your research paper, it still has the more argumentative tone that you need to edit out of it. Present the facts as succinctly as possible. Also, you will need to frame this as being about gaining custody in the dissolution of straight marriages. Finally, be sure to edit this carefully. --Jbdolphin (talk) 07:41, 12 May 2021 (UTC)