User talk:Ychhean/sandbox

I really like how you summarized the hallmark from the Hallmarks of Aging article and how you proceed to go into the aricle you are discussing about. I just have a couple ideas on how to strengthen the future article in your sandbox. Try discussing more background on the subject. We want to make this accesible to people that have some science background but might be new to the concept of intercellular communication. Therefore adding background on what it means between neuronal, endocrine, and neuroendocrine would be important. It is also helpful to link certain words or "common knowledge" science terms to other wikipedia pages. For example, intercellular communication. If you click on it it should take you to a page that can explain more in depth if the reader has a specific interest in this. That way you can give a baseline explanation without bogging down your article with details that can be found in this page. Other than that it looks like a great start! Shbau001 (talk) 14:22, 9 March 2017 (UTC)

I think that this is a great start and you did a good job summarizing. I would add a little more detail to it though, for example you could explain the three types of intracellular communications more like where they occur and what types of cells carry out these communications. You could also maybe explain the kinases and the hormone some more, like what they are responsible for and how they contribute to aging. (Yocha001 (talk) 18:18, 21 March 2017 (UTC))

I like the new paragraph you added. I feel like you may be able to add more outside sources to the theme of progress so that we can have a more comprehensive idea of how research has developed and where future directions are going. I would also still add links to other wiki pages that elaborate on more basic concepts brought up in your article just so the reader will have other resources to reference. Also, in the second to last sentence of your last sentence agrees should be agree. Other than that it's a good start! Shbau001 (talk) 01:27, 18 April 2017 (UTC)