User talk:Ychoi272/sandbox

I like how you have a thesis for your article, and the details of the relationship between K-pop and Youtube are well-written. Do you have any references for your article?

Hkim856 (talk) 16:29, 19 October 2018 (UTC) Piggybacking the peer's comment above, please provide all your sources. You also need to consider changing the tone of the article, as this draft looks more like an essay, rather than a neutral article. It is perfectly fine that you have a niche, but your readers will think this article is strongly opinionated. One easy way to fix this issue is to modify sentences that begin with "we" and "you" -- who are "we"/"you" in this context?

The second half of the draft could be much more improved if you can demonstrate these statistics in a more precise and simply way -- otherwise, the current organization of information can be quite distracting.

Hkim856 (talk) 20:04, 30 October 2018 (UTC) Any updates?

-Yujin I did some edits for resources, modifying sentences, making charts for statistic data and adding more information! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ychoi272 (talk • contribs) 01:11, 12 November 2018 (UTC)