User talk:YesToYummy/sandbox

As a short peer review - you seem to have put in a lot of research regarding your draft. You already have lots of sources to back you up, so good for you! On things that could be, not improved, but maybe added, would be a question of whether cheese was consumed in regions other than Europe or not. Although not in the exact same form as European cheese, some places like Turkey, Mongolia and some other Central Asian countries had similar food. I think it would be good if you looked into whether those could be counted as part of a history of cheese, and if they do, put in maybe a short section such as "cheese in other parts of the world." Also, I would want to know the process behind how other European countries, such as Britain as you mentioned, took in French cheese as part of their own cuisine. In our class, when we talked about the middle ages, we talked a lot about how Roman - French - British cuisine all had effects on each other's cuisines. Maybe cheese was part of it? Moreover, you mention that cheese was very important in catholic monasteries. That is very true, due to things that you mentioned such as being used as a substitute for meat. But because monastery culture has had such a big impact on the development of cheese, if you could find other interesting facts on the relationship between monasteries and cheese, such as cheese being used as finger food while drinking wine, it would be a great boost. Overall, I think the future of your draft looks very bright, and I would most definitely like to read what your final WIKI paper looks like! --9jwchoi (talk) 02:04, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Hi Abby! As per usual, things look pretty great. I think you have done a great job so far adding information about cheese from the Middle Ages onward, and the content is very well written and great to read. I like how you have added quite a bit of information in each paragraph, so that their not short and awkward. I think you should definitely keep up this trend as you write more and continue to edit your piece. I do think that you need to add some more sources to your case, though, only because I know Wikipedia is really picky. Plus, I'm sure extra sources would be handy for other readers outside our Food History class too! Another thing I would note is that perhaps you could consider adding in tid bits that would, actually, relate back to class in some way. Perhaps consider talking about cheese in relation to class and social hierarchy- I'm wondering how maybe the cheese-eating class changed and varied in different regions throughout time? Also, we recently have been talking alot about colonialism, trade, etc. Perhaps you could mention something about cheese in terms of the cattle or animals that were available- like goats vs cows- and how this changed with the growth of trade, traveling, etc. And of course, maybe add in some cool facts and ideas about how cheese is used today. YUM YUM CHEESE RECIPES. What about vegan cheese? Maybe throw that in there too. Anyway, I'm sure your 'cheesy' article will be delish! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Natiann123 (talk • contribs) 14:54, 28 November 2017 (UTC)