User talk:Yhlim/sandbox

Hi, I enjoyed reading your article. It has a lot of information that I was not aware of about UBC. The only two suggestions: 1) I have (if they can be added) are a visuals. If there are pictures of the heating system that UBC is using.  2) The second part on, Principles of Biomass systems seems a little "thin". I would have like more of how the systems work and how it generates energy. For example, is it a generator? is does it burn the wood? and what is the gas? Would you consider making a flow chart to diagram the process with input and outputs? Joyce Feb 26 (originally posted) — Preceding unsigned comment added by JoyceCee (talk • contribs) 05:06, 1 March 2013 (UTC)


 * A lead section would help to increase clarity of the article
 * Although I can see what sources are used at the bottom of the page, I cannot see what data comes from which source. This leaves a lot of work to the reader to figure out from what source the information is drawn, especially because a lot of numbers and specific data is used. Specific inline citations would drastically improve transparency and credibility.
 * The links to Climate Action Plan and Nexterra lead to pages outside of Wikipedia.
 * At the same time many terms that could have been linked to wikipedia pages are not. E.g. GHG, UBC, GE, Biomass.
 * At one point "percent" is used and then on several other points "per cent" is used. While I think both a correct, consistency in the usage would improve the style of the article.
 * It is stated that UBC met its Kyoto protocol targets. As the Kyoto protocol is a UN framework that applies to nations and not to non-governmental actors, I believe UBC cannot per se have official Kyoto protocol targets. Maybe revise that part?
 * The principle of the biomass system is not specific, more details would add clarity to the process.
 * Maybe a picture of the plant? Or a schematic image of the process of energy generation through the usage of biomass would help?
 * In general a more structured article would help to add understanding, as a lot of the information in the first paragraph could be moved to one of the sub-headers.

Bio345 misa (talk) 04:27, 27 February 2013 (UTC)