User talk:Yifanbao1/sandbox

Peer review feedback
Peer Editor: Tasmia Rahman I think that you did a really job good on your article because you kept a very neutral tone and presented a lot of factual, useful information that is important to your topic. I also really appreciated your section on Tik Tok and Media Democracy because it was really interesting and I feel that you really showcased how democracy, specifically within the Trump campaign, was really effected by it. Some things I would improve would include some of your citations. You have a lot of really good quotes but a lot of them are not properly cited so I would add that. Additionally, on the section regarding Media Ownership Concentration, I feel that the format you used (in the middle, on the left) is possibly not the best formation and doesn’t look the most professional due to the bullet points. I would instead convert into paragraph form to make it look better. I feel like your tone was very well done and it did not sound encyclopedic. Great job!Tasmia.r (talk) 18:46, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer Evaluation: Hey this is Komal! I really appreciate that you explained that the article needs more reliable sources, but I would recommend to diversifyy sources so you have a wellrounded article with different resources to back up your information. I really like how you broke up the different news channels and how they are biased as well as including statistical percentages. I really like how you included “Five Countries With Severe Media Censorship” I think it really educates the reader, I personally learned a lot. I think it's really important that you included the BLM campaign and how it was presented on platforms, I would recommend to include a few more platforms and emphasize how they were impacted and how other businesses were impacted. Overall the draft is very well written, Good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Komalbadesha (talk • contribs) 01:53, 14 October 2020 (UTC)