User talk:YilinW722/sandbox

Hey Yilin! Just want to say thanks for your peer review on my digital privacy article. I agree with everything you noted, especially the bit on format and citations. I've actually already made a lot of the changes you mention. Unfortunately I haven't posted them yet since uploading my draft, but they will be available later tonight. I'll be sure to keep your comments in mind as I continue to edit. Much thanks again! Dcha94exi2 (talk) 21:52, 15 November 2018 (UTC)

Fangzhu's Peer Review
Hi Yilin,

I am glad to read over your editing draft of "Literary Inquisition". You did a good job on adding detailed information about literary inquisition before Song dynasty and during Song dynasty as the original article provided little information covering these periods.

In terms of the structure, I think it would be better to split the period "before Song dynasty" into several sections in a chronological way since you mentioned "Han dynasty", "Northern Wei dynasty" and "Sui Dynasty". This would be much easier for readers to get a better understanding of literary inquisition in different periods. According to the definition of literary inquisition you added in the lead, we can see that literary inquisition may not only be confined in ancient China. Therefore, it would be also necessary to provide related information in contemporary China as there are some revolutions aiming to prosecute intellectuals due to their offensive writings or words.

In terms of the content, I think it's good you added many detailed information and some cases related with the main topic, especially those background information. However, I'd suggest to focus more on explaining why those writings were considered as a kind of offense or defamation during different periods since not every reader has such a strong background in this topic. You did a good job on explaining the reasons of literary acquisition regarding the case in Spring and Autumn period, i.e."using the word "弑" (she)".

In terms of the source, I think sources are good in general and you cited many academic sources, which I need to learn from you to incorporate more academic citations. A little reminder is the 5th reference's format needs to be double checked as it seems that its link does not work. For sure, it would be good to incorporate some other types of reliable sources as well. In terms of the tone, I think the article's tone is pretty neutral.

In sum, you did a good job on your draft! FangzhuLu (talk) 01:37, 16 November 2018 (UTC)