User talk:Yocko0128/sandbox

Draft feedback
Phbrownacmorg (talk) 02:44, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
 * + Good material!
 * - Draft is still pretty short (563 words)
 * - Stub material wasn't imported
 * - I don't see anything from Emma. Get her involved!
 * Suggestions for improvement:
 * Major points
 * Import the stub material, and integrate it into your stuff
 * Figure out your organization, and make it clear. Right now, you dive right in without much context, and then it feels like you're wandering from group to group of dinosaurs.  (Please note that I'm not saying you really are wandering&mdash;I don't know that.  Rather, I'm saying that because your organizing principle isn't made clear, the article feels like you're wandering to the reader.
 * Flesh it out.
 * Lesser points
 * Cite Everything! &#9786; You appear to have the sources; they're just not attached directly to the material they supplied.
 * Surface errors