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Higher Education in India - Peer Review
History


 * I think adding adding the fact about how the British government used India's university system as a way of "cultural colonization" is important to add. It will show why a system for higher education was established in India as well as why it may still possess certain, British elements today.
 * Also would be good to add that point about how the East India company carried out "colonial efforts in higher education," and potentially before this line, "The first institution of higher learning set up by the British East India Company was the Calcutta Madrasa in 1781." It will convey how business and culture overlapped
 * The organization of the section could be improved. For instance, in the very first lines you discuss the ancient history of the higher education system, and then jump to how "the modern Indian education system finds its roots in colonial legacy."
 * Great work overall with remaining unbiased and verifying all the information
 * Very thorough with the facts

Issues
 * The first paragraph needs a source
 * Are there any policy proposals that you could potentially add that address the problems of unequal access to education and inadequate teachers? Doing so will make the section sound less critical of India's government

Katrina0118 (talk) 14:01, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Himachal Pradesh - Peer Review
Economy
 * I think it's important to know why Himachal Pradesh is one of the best performing states in India. What main goods/services do they mainly provide? You stated has an abundance of energy resources, how the state exports electricity to other states and then in the Natural Resources section you write how the state has the highest energy consumption. This is where I think you can potentially merge the section of "Natural Resources" and 'Economy" together.

Education
 * Is there any information that you can find as to why Himachal Pradesh why enrollment rates for girls in the state are high in contrast to other states in India?
 * Stats on enrollment rates for girls would be good here

Natural Resources
 * Source is needed in the first paragraph
 * Definition of LPGs is necessary

General Comments
 * Good sources
 * Organization can be improved in order to have the relevant information arranged more cohesively
 * Great details and sounds encyclopedic

Katrina0118 (talk) 14:21, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Sector
In History:

-add the possible contributions!

-great flow & super informative & good use of encyclopedic/neutral tone

In Issue section:

-add information about gender inequality that arises

-inability of state to find expanding higher education- why is this so?

-talk about inequality as a result of limited higher education

-is higher education in India working with UN/other NGOs for equal access to education

Area
In Natural Resources:

-explain LPGs and why it was introduced?

-alternative for the hydro-power?- current suggestions and pros/cons

-why does Pradesh have high energy consumption rate?

-overall, great flow and easy to understandJenny1004jeon (talk) 03:54, 17 March 2018 (UTC)