User talk:Yrz9558/sandbox

Hkim856 (talk) 13:44, 19 October 2018 (UTC) Nicely done. You can address three issues at this point. 1) structure: the second paragraph of your draft doesn't fit perfectly in. You might want to consider deleting the first sentence (“Hallyu” is a present South Koran Pop culture, and this strong trend just likes a tornado, has swept across the world, especially in Asian.) given that your first paragraph already includes this information. And then begin your second paragraph. ("Reality TV show as a part of Korea Pop culture is very popular. In "Running Man", every episode will invite different Korean pop star that includes famous singer, movie star, music band. The MCs and guests were to complete missions at a landmark to win the game.") 2) the popularity of reality TV show (above) is not sourced. 3) your current draft is currently linked to a song, not a TV show.

Hkim856 (talk) 20:07, 30 October 2018 (UTC) Any updates?