User talk:Yszhang/sandbox

Please see me immediately
Dear Mr Zhang,

In previous communications I have asked you to shift your topic, since this one is too far from our course themes. You have received no points so far, and a total of 30 are due today. Are you still enrolled in this class? DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 13:32, 20 November 2018 (UTC)

Have you dropped this course?
Dear Mr Zhang Please see me immediately. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 13:20, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Onwards with your article
Dear Mr Zhang

Good new topic: is there an existing article? Your prose is far below the necessary standard. Once you establish if this is a new article or addition to existing article, you can start on the prose editing process with the Teaching and Learning Commons. You do not have any independent academic sources at all, except for the assigned books for class. The popular journal Jewish Currents does not count, nor does the internet My Jewish Learning. I am giving you 5 more points but you have a long way to go. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:15, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

You are almost read to publish
Dear Mr Zhang

Huge improvement!!! Great topic and good job so far. Will give you the third 5 points, and you should be due for the next 15 after you do some fixes.

You have a lot of material in the beginning of the article, then you start with sections, but have only one section. Maybe you don't need sections and a Table of Contents at all?

Foonotes 3,4, and 5 need fixing. Refer to the University of Chicago manual of style.

Please send me an email to hertzd@ucsd.edu to let me know when you think you have fixed these problems.

I would also take your text to the staff at the Teaching and Learning Commons in the library to see if they can help with the prose.

DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 19:09, 12 December 2018 (UTC)