User talk:Yzo5031/Technology and society/Mmh65 Peer Review

After reading the article in its entirety and referring back to the talk page, it was evident that this page needed some work and some of that was completed with the updated version. Comments are as followed:

•The main concern thus far seems to be the heading titles for each section. I would capitalize both words in the headings and not just to first word. It is throwing the reader off just a bit, but it is a quick fix.

•I would do a bit more research on the topic as a whole because there seems to be some gaps within the information. There are not that many references and therefore the first step could be to find more resources that will fill those gaps.

•Unfortunately, much of the talk page for the article is a heated discussion between 2 parties and does not seem to be productive on either side. I wish there was more information about edits made or edits to be made about this material.

Mohammad Hussain