User talk:Zachaguirre/sandbox

Hello fellow classmate!

I am your peer editor ^^. Your information about the battle of Mogadishu is precise, pinpointing several key dates, and you rely on a variety of sources. As a suggestion, perhaps include more information about international forces or the importance of this battle to the history/formation/collapse of Somalia. You may also want to add more historical facts about why this war came about (eg. resources of the state/prestige and legitimacy of controlling the capital)

Good Luck!

HollowPorcelain (talk) 21:54, 15 October 2018 (UTC)HollowPorcelain

I think that the overall content and neutrality of what you've done so far is great. It's factually based with a good amount of sources relative to the info that you have. I agree with the suggestion made that you should include more on the significance of this battle in the historical context of Somalia. To add to that, I also think that expanding on the two forces involved and why they came to prominence would help: like expanding of the goals for "influence" by the ICU (influencing who and how), as well outlining the fundamental differences between the forces/make it clear why they are separate, conflicting entities.

Victoria0998 (talk) 20:20, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Zach, I think you did a nice job with the background research. For some of your sources, perhaps look at a few more scholarly journals. I think this may help strengthen the research you already have conducted. Otherwise, I think you are on the right path for having a strong page. Wnicolai33 (talk) 02:06, 24 October 2018