User talk:Zachary Vinson/sandbox

Group 1 Talk/Sandbox
Good stuff Juan. I have put the NEPman article in my sandbox and we can use this talk page to communicate about our edits. It appears we have a week or so to draft our article summary so we need to get going on adding good information to it. Let me know if there is any problems or questions. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 19:42, 7 February 2019 (UTC))

So I just added a section to our article called NEP under Lenin. I think we should use Juan's idea and describe what life was like for NEPmen under Lenin and then under Stalin. My summary still needs more sources and more work, but if we create another subsection about Stalin I think it will flow perfectly. Let me know what you guys think and make any changes you feel is necessary. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 20:11, 11 February 2019 (UTC))

Good stuff guys, I think it is really coming along. Today I am going to try to refine some of my work and add some more sources. I guess we will see if any of the others participate and fill in the rest of the Stalin section. If not I guess we will finish it up and submit what we have. I think our two sections added along with some media we will add here soon is a pretty good improvement of the article. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 16:39, 14 February 2019 (UTC))

Ok I added a couple of new sources to our article and added some more information under the Lenin section. I also cleaned the section up a bit to improve the flow of the article.(Zachary Vinson (talk) 20:13, 14 February 2019 (UTC))

Hey guys, does anyone know how to organize our sources/refrence list. I attempted to do so, but I gave up.JuanAragon96 (talk) 21:56, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

In our sandbox the references are kind of messed up, it did not copy right when I brought the article over from Wikipedia. I am in the middle of my work week right now, but in a couple of days I will have some time to look at it and try to figure it out. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 03:20, 16 February 2019 (UTC))

I fixed the references section to have them superscripted and go to the right citation. I do not think I mixed any of them up, but you guys can check it out and make sure. Also, someone in our group needs to fill out the rest of the Stalin section to complete our article. Me and Juan have both contributed almost full sections to our article and Rebecca has helped with citations and other things. So I feel like someone else needs to step in and help out. We have done more than our share of work, especially Juan and I. I am going to try to find a picture to add to our article today to give it more flare.Zachary Vinson (talk) 17:53, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

I have added a media source and also provided links in the Lenin section to other articles. If someone wants to go and do it for the Stalin portion that would be a good idea. I am off Wednesday so I will start moving our work live to the actual Wikipedia page then. Zachary Vinson (talk) 18:50, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

I have moved our first two sections of our article to the live NEPman page. When the last section is complete, then someone can move the rest over. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zachary Vinson (talk • contribs) 16:52, 20 February 2019 (UTC)

Article Selection

 * 1) Nepman - NEPman
 * 2)  1936 Soviet Constitution - 1936 Soviet Constitution
 * 3)  Soviet Famine of 1932-1933 - Soviet famine of 1932–33
 * 4)  Flight of the Poles - Polar route

Zachary's Evaluation
For this evaluation I chose the Wikipedia article, Joseph Stalin in the Russian Revolution, Russian Civil War, and Polish–Soviet War. This article is a moderately well put together piece on Joseph Stalin and his involvement in Russian politics during the various wars going on at the time. The editors who put together this article did a good job at keeping the piece neutral. However, there are a couple of instances where they seem to speak negatively about Stalin, getting away from the facts of his legacy. Overall, the article is very relevant to the subject matter, there was nothing there that did not belong in my opinion. The flow and organization of the piece feels like it fits the order in which the events transpired over history, but there are a few of lines in the article that do not reference back to a particular source. The sources the article used on the other hand, appear to be neutral and support the articles content. All the information in the article seems to be accurate, but I will say I have not learned enough about the subject to know if that is completely true. Overall the article is pretty well put together, minis the bias lines and non attributed content.

Juan's Evaluation
Adhering to Wikipedia's evaluation guidelines the NEPmen article is both sufficient and insufficient in fulfilling specific attributes. The article is successfully written in a neutral tone abstaining from the usage of bias language, or emphasis of particular arguments. The article is brief and maintains focus, and there is no unnecessary or distracting content within the page. However, the NEPmen article may be too short as information pertaining to relevant concepts or relationships are neglected; for example, the famine of 1922, and its role in the cultivation of the New Economic Plan. Additionally, the article could use the addition of subsequent sections, perhaps a subsection for the Lenin Era, and a section for the Stalin Era; after all, the NEPmen were present during both periods, but influenced socioeconomic dynamics differently for each era. Finally, Paragraph two and three include information are lacking in appropriate citations.

Rebecca's Evaluation
NEPmen is a decent article but could definitely use some work. Here are some of my suggestions to make this article better. -More sources. Some of the material in the existing article needs to be cited. -A history on what led the Soviet Union to the New Economic Policy. -Information about what happened in the Soviet Union during this time. -Why did NEP end?

Zachary's Edits
1. Siegelbaum, Lewis H., and American Council of Learned Societies. Soviet State and Society between Revolutions
 * I added a citation to the possible refrences section. This could be useful in writing about how the NEPman were treated under Stalin.
 * I added a section called NEPmen under Lenin. I think we should use Juan's idea and write about how the life of a NEPman changed from Lenin to Stalin. I feel my section has a lot of good information and tells most of the story under Lenin. However, it could use a few more sources to back up the info and also maybe some more detailed information. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 20:08, 11 February 2019 (UTC))
 * I added a new sentence under the Lenin section and also a new source and citation for the article. (Zachary Vinson (talk) 19:37, 14 February 2019 (UTC))
 * I added a great stat about the NEPmens trade efficiency under the Lenin section along with a new source with it
 * I also cleaned up the Lenin article so it flows a little better (Zachary Vinson (talk) 20:03, 14 February 2019 (UTC))
 * I added a graph image to our article to improve its substance
 * I also added links to other Wikipedia pages in the Lenin sectionZachary Vinson (talk) 18:43, 18 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I fixed the references to where they will superscript to the right citation — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zachary Vinson (talk • contribs) 17:49, 18 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Moved first two sections over to wikipedia's live NEPman page — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zachary Vinson (talk • contribs) 16:51, 20 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Sources I have added or used to contrubute to the article

2. Kiaer, Christina, and Eric Naiman. Everyday Life In Early Soviet Russia

3. Ball, Alan (1990). Russia's last capitalists the Nepmen, 1921-1929

4. Fitzpatrick, Sheila (1991). Russia in the Era of NEP (suggested source)

Juan's Edits

 * Zachary and Group 1 I edited this sandbox with "possible references." I added the citation that I inserted to the NEPmen page. I figure we could use the source again later.JuanAragon96 (talk) 01:18, 3 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I added my article evaluation to the sandbox, could possibly cultivate some ideasJuanAragon96 (talk) 20:00, 7 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I discovered that within paragrpah 2, sentence 1, copied and pasted the infromation from a website; additionally, the author did not cite this source. I corrected this error. Finnaly, I organized our talk so that we can navigate more efficiently.
 * Edited and added source to paragrpah 1 sentence 2.JuanAragon96 (talk) 21:08, 8 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Added subheading Nepmen Under Stalin, and added subsequent paragraph; however, I did not finnish the paragraph so that other groupmembers could participate. Additionally, I added several sources, including a source inside zachary's edidted page.JuanAragon96 (talk) 20:05, 13 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I edited our talk page and our article by removing all our discussion from the main page to our talk page; additionally, I reformatted our talk page, just to keep things organized.JuanAragon96 (talk) 21:54, 14 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I added some more information to Nepmen Under Stalin, but I did not finnish it.
 * Finnished article section Nepmen Under Stalin. JuanAragon96 (talk) 00:33, 23 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Sources added:
 * 1) McCauley, Martin (2013). Stalin and Stalinism (3rd ed.). London & New York: Routledge. ISBN 978-1-4058-74366.
 * 2) Siegelbaum, Lewis (2016). "NEPmen". Seventeen Moments in Soviet History.
 * 3) Siegelbaum, Lewis (1922). Soviet State and Society Between Revolutions,. New York: Cambridge University Press. ISBN 052136215 Check |isbn= value: length (help).
 * 4) Duranty, Walter (1924). "Russia is Hard Hit by War on 'NEPmen'". New York Times
 * 5) Ball, A., & American Council of Learned Societies. (1990). Russia's last capitalists : The Nepmen, 1921-1929 (1st paperback printing.. ed.). Berkeley: University of California Press.
 * 6)  Vitalʹevich),, Khlevni︠u︡k, O. V. (Oleg; Витальевич), Хлевнюк, О. В. (Олег. Stalin : new biography of a dictator. Favorov, Nora Seligman,. New Haven. ISBN 9780300163889. OCLC 893896537.
 * 7)  Alan., Ball, (2006). Building a new state and society : NEP, 1921-1928. [s.n.] OCLC 883475347.
 * 8) author., Pauley, Bruce F.,. Hitler, Stalin, and Mussolini : totalitarianism in the twentieth century. ISBN 9781118765920. OCLC 893459634.

Rebecca's Edits

 * I also added some ideas/missing pieces for the article. Thank you for setting up the talk page & sandbox Zachary! Beccann6112 —Preceding undated comment added 22:37, 7 February 2019 (UTC)
 * I changed the punctuation/sentence structure in a the paragraph about Stalin.
 * I added a sentence about how the Bolsheviks disliked and feared the NEPmen. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Beccann6112 (talk • contribs) 02:24, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Instructions
Please write peer review below "module 6: Peer Review." To minimize confusion, please create a Heading 3 (i.g., "Instructions") containing your name; for example, "Jane" or "Jane's Review." We look forward to your assistance with our article.

Zachary Rady Peer Review
The edits that have thus far been made have done a good job on expanding and clarifying the information found in the original NEPmen article. The edits are well written keeping the proper neutral tone. The flow of the information in each section is well integrated and the transitions between the sections feels natural. Furthermore, the breakup of the information into the different sections does a good job of clarifying the changes and effects of NEPmen in each period. The information is well presented and does a good job at what NEPmen were and their impact on soviet society. Citations are well placed and backed up by a strong list of reliable sources.

There are a few problems in sentence structure in the first section where different sentences switch tenses between past and future tense, i.e. “would challenge” and “would allow” verses “became.” For clarity and consistency, it might be helpful to use only one tense, such as past tense. At this time the NEPman Under Stalin section is rather thin compared to the other sections. More information to clarify the changes to NEPmen that are discussed would be useful. For instance, more background information on the economic situation in 1924 could be useful. Furthermore, additional information or sections about the end of NEP and the fate of NEPmen would also be useful. Another thing to consider is the addition of a lead section that briefly summarizes what NEPmen and their big picture effects, in line with the lead sections of other Wikipedia articles. The addition of visual elements, such as related photographs if there are any available, might also be helpful.

Overall, I feel that your group has done a very good job with this article. You are well on your way to having a thorough well put together Wikipedia article. Good Job!-Zrady (talk) 06:19, 16 February 2019 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW
Zachary, After looking at your article, I believe that the sections you have in your sandbox have a clear structure. Based on some of the questions that are asked during the training has made me realize a few things about your article. One of the things is being satisfied with the information. Through reading the first few sentences, I already can see the description of who NEPmen were. It doesn't seem like anything is off topic, but each paragraph seems to have sufficient information. I do feel like the third section may need a little more meat, but what it does have is great. The sources look like good ones, the ones I looked up at least. Keep up the good work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marvgarc (talk • contribs) 06:39, 16 February 2019 (UTC)

Charmayne's Peer Review
The edits made to this article have made the infomation more clear and consolidated for the reader. There is no bias which helps the reader to understand facts about Nepman and not opinion. I would say a few images could add some visuals for the reader as to who the NEPman were. I did enjoy the breakdown of NEPman under Lenin and NEPman under Stalin. However I think NEPman under Stalin could be expanded a bit more. The links were all sufficent, and sources were well planned out. Over all there were not many errors where the structure and grammar was concerned. Great job so far! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chargrad2020 (talk • contribs) 02:47, 18 February 2019 (UTC)