User talk:Zakira seidu/sandbox

Peer Review for Zakira Seidu
There is a nice hook where the first sentence tells the reader exactly what they are going to read about in this section. All of your sources seem reliable and I like how you gave out numbers for the number of people using what kinds of contraceptives in different areas. The paragraph remained neutral throughout, and the structure was clear and concise. Something I would work on is maybe instead of just adding numbers, explain some of the numbers and reasons to them. Maybe even add in the history of availability of birth control methods and how far they have come? Also, maybe where the funding of the contraceptives come from? Maybe in the beginning you could add in the background to the birth control of Africa and do more comparisons of Africa to other countries. If they are falling behind or progressing more than other countries. Victoriali2 (talk) 03:52, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review for Zakira by Brittney
The main problems that prevent access to and use of birth control are unavailability Changed word, poor health care services, spousal disapproval, religious concerns, and misinformation about the effects of birth control

I liked this sentence but maybe reword the beginning "the main problem" could be indicating judgement or bias

Public policies and cultural attitudes play a role in birth control prevalence

Maybe expand on this idea a little more??

'''For the methods section, I wasn't 100% sure why you where comparing sub-Sahara to North American and Europe. Also maybe if a more whole definition instead of "the pill" it just sound more like jargon then academic. Other than that I thought that it was good, you have a good overall tone to the article and besides the few spots I pointed out you have a clear academic and information voice and you cited meany sources winch is good''' — Preceding unsigned comment added by BrittneyWright (talk • contribs) 05:03, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

peer review by Vivian
you had a great hook. it got straight to the point. i like how you included almost every single method of birth control and the percentage of people that had access to them back in the day. I like that you compared Africa's usage of birth control to Asia and North America but i felt that you could've went into more detail about it. Based on the data in the article, it seems like you have reliable sources. maybe you could go more depth about the percentage and what that means for the country of africa and their population. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Viviansayavong (talk • contribs) 05:22, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

JOrtz Peer Review 2/10
Article: Contraception use in Africa[edit] Most of the prevalence rate on contraption use in Africa in the article are outdated. My plan is to go back, look for current statistics and add them to the article. I also found a peer reviewed article which talked about the role of public-sector family planning in Sub-Saharan Africa. I find this addition to the article helpful because as mentioned in class, most of these African countries greatly rely on their government. So it will be very helpful to include the government. There was a lot of focus on Sub-Saharan African because that is where the problem currently is and most have not gone through the fertility transition. Another addition will be Coale's Precondition for fertility declines as it relates to contraception use as well.

Most of the countries with the lowest rates of contraceptive use; highest maternal, infant, and child mortality rates; and highest fertility rates are in Africa.[1][2][3][4][5]However, there has been a decline in fertility rates and infant and child mortality rates in developing countries due to increased contraception use.[6][7] Infant mortality Rate has decline from 142 deaths per 1000 live births to 99 death per 1000 live births. The Total Fertility Rate in Africa has decreased from 6.5 births per woman in 1960 to 2.4 births per woman in Southern Africa, 3.1 births per woman in Northern Africa, 4.5 births per woman in Eastern Africa and 5.2 live birth per woman in Western and Middle Africa. Decline in fertility rates, especially decline in adolescent fertility rates in Africa is greatly influenced by the increased age at which women get married and increased level of education.[7] Contraception use is higher among sexually active women age 15-44 in Africa than in Asia or Latin American where it is lower.

Approximately 64% of married and sexually active women worldwide use birth control, although over half of all African women would use birth control if it were available.[8][9][10]33% of married women and sexually active women of childbearing age use birth control in Africa. Approximately 24% of these women have unmet needs for birth control compared to 12% worldwide. By 2030, contraception use among married and sexually active women is expected to increase in West Africa from 17% (2015) to 27%, 23-34% in Middle Africa, 39-45% in Melanesia, Micronesia, Polynesia, 40-55% in Eastern Africa, A decrease in contraception use from 24% to 18% is expected in Eastern Africa by 2030.[10] The main problems that prevent access to and use of birth control are unavailability, poor health care services, spousal disapproval, religious concerns, and misinformation about the effects of birth control.[8] The most available type of birth control is condoms.[11] There is evidence that increased use of family planning methods decreases maternal and infant mortality rates, improves quality of life for mothers, and stimulates economic development.[12][13][14][15]

Public policies and cultural attitudes play a role in birth control prevalence.[16][17]

1. You have a very well written out article. It is precise and to the point with all the information!

2. There are a few grammar/capitalization errors.

"Infant mortality Rate has decline from 142 deaths per 1000 live births to 99 death per 1000 live births." In this sentence "Rate" shouldn't be capitalized.

In this sentence "33% of married women and sexually active women of childbearing age use birth control in Africa." Try to start the sentence with "In Africa 33%..." because I believe it is better to start like that than with a percentage.

"By 2030, contraception use among married and sexually active women is expected to increase in West Africa from 17% (2015) to 27%, 23-34% in Middle Africa, 39-45% in Melanesia, Micronesia, Polynesia, 40-55% in Eastern Africa, A decrease in contraception use from 24% to 18% is expected in Eastern Africa by 2030." the "a" before decrease doesn't need to be capitalized.

3. Everything else is looking great!!! Good article!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by JOrtz (talk • contribs) 22:42, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
· You did a great job of incorporating statistics to support this article. It makes this article more credible. · Although there is a lot of great things in this article that you incorporated, perhaps maybe going into further elaboration to better understand. · Another great part about this article are the sources used. After looking into them, they look credible · Overall, this was a great addition to this article! — Preceding unsigned comment added by ArianaDelgadillo22 (talk • contribs) 04:31, 12 April 2018 (UTC)