User talk:Zakr4034/sandbox

Hi Liz!

Just went over the section you've written and I have a few recommendations for you. Everything is clear and understandable, the recommendations are a few ways to make it even stronger! Good job!

1). Where there any review articles that mentioned the increased rates of females using firearms? This would be a great piece of evidence to add to section discussing the rising numbers of HFHL in females.

2). Just a grammatical fix, the section, "...it is documented that 90% young adults across U.S. and European surveys..." would run smoother if it had a "of" after the "90%".

3). You mentioned that PLDs at max volume can be up to 120dB. Maybe mention the TWA value for 120dB?

Carla.White (talk) 21:14, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Carla.White